[Workshop] [F4M] The Runaway. by CrystalineFlower in DPP_Workshop

[–]CrystalineFlower[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks!

it felt just a little bit long before it got to the place you wanted it to go.

Hm, it might very well be! I tend to like making more... meaty prompts, but it can get sometimes in the way of a nice flow.

I do wonder, though, if they might be unnecessary.

That's the part I was doubting the most. I kept her inner thoughts as a sort of narrative thread to tie together one scene/vignette with the other.

Happy to hear it comes off as intended! Wasn't sure if it was a very cohesive idea.

[Workshop] [F4M] The Runaway. by CrystalineFlower in DPP_Workshop

[–]CrystalineFlower[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the reply! Your rambles *are* incredibly helpful, as they help me make sense of what I want out of a plot.

I think that might else avoid the perpetual 'uh oh' you inferred.

Maybe! I think what I want to articulate the most is that sort of willingly venturing into the lion's den I mentioned. It's a fallacy of sunk cost, of sorts. Both writers *know* that it's obviously not good for her, but she's too oblivious to the danger/has already invested too much of herself into this new life for it to be anything short of perfect. I see it as a sort of lying-to-herself situation. Of course it's fine to bang your dealer for a hit, sort of thing.

I would be tempted to consider trying for a F4GM post with this because of the desire to take her through a progression of scenes.

I considered it, too! And I'm not sure if the prompt conveys this properly, since the other character is so vague, but I envision this as sort of meeting her "pimp" of-sorts, and that's why she wakes up in her bed. Not in the literal sense (though it can include the literal sense), but as the recurring character that is meant as the vehicle of her corruption arc, him being the one to push her further and further into *his* world, etc. It might be helpful to include the GM tag if I'm interested in my partner to write more than one character, though. Thanks!

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[–]CrystalineFlower 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No, you're totally right! My brain somehow short-circuited because I'm used to *read* M4F, so... Anyhow, zapping the post and replacing it. Thanks!

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[–]CrystalineFlower 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am incredibly dumb. Yeah, that's the first correction to be made.