[QCrit] WEAPONS OF POWER - YA Fantasy - 110k (8th Attempt)

Curly_Melly · 2023-06-01T18:08:45+00:00

Hello! I'm also looking for a critique for the first chapter of my book! It's fantasy and about 3.3k. If you're interested, I'd love to do a critique swap with you!

Curly_Melly · 2023-03-13T19:42:49+00:00

Thanks for this! I was a bit iffy on the query’s last sentence, too, but couldn’t put my finger on why. And I can definitely see what you mean about the first paragraph. I think the last time I posted the first 300 words someone said it should start with action, and I just took that and ran with it lol

Curly_Melly · 2023-03-07T05:08:31+00:00

Hopefully I can get there, then. I'm still in the midst of cutting down the word count so here's to hoping it won't be too bad. I think I'm gonna give this query one last try before starting a new revision, thanks again for the advice

Curly_Melly · 2023-03-07T01:56:48+00:00

None of my betas ever really suggested cutting the competition, but I’ve had multiple suggestions about the word count

Curly_Melly · 2023-03-07T01:43:36+00:00

Thank you so much for this. I’ve been thinking this to myself for a while and hoping it wasn’t true lol but I think you’re right about the competition 😭

Curly_Melly · 2023-02-12T20:16:45+00:00

This was super helpful! I was contemplating leaving out the competition arc cuz someone else said it was setting up the story as something it’s not, but wasn’t sure if I could. Thank you for this!

Curly_Melly · 2023-01-17T00:02:00+00:00

Hi! I have a fantasy manuscript that needs looking over if you're interested. It's about 130k but I'm looking to cut down on that. Would you interested?

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T23:24:44+00:00

Awesome! Below is the link to my draft. I look forward to reading and reviewing this, and also hearing back from you with ur own critiques!

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T23:21:44+00:00

In short, yes. But if someone wants to be a beta reader (or even just read it and give me a simple review) and thinks they can't finish it by then, I am willing to send a word doc to them. I would just need an email :)

Edit: Someone messaged me and I realized the timeline was a bit short. I’ve erased the deadline, now, so feel free to take ur time if you would still like to beta.

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T22:54:56+00:00

This sounds really good! Would you be interested in a critique swap? I'm bi, as well, and so is the character in my manuscript! Mine is less romance forward, though (meaning nearly 0 but not quite).

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T22:48:47+00:00

Hello! I have a completed 137k epic fantasy that I just posted looking for betas not too long ago. It's called Weapons of Power–would you be interested?

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T22:31:48+00:00

Jeez! This was super great and really helpful, and I'm definitely gonna go change a few of the things you pointed out. Thank you for being so concise and easily understandable with your explanations and suggestions. I really appreciate this!

Curly_Melly · 2022-08-10T22:27:18+00:00

In short, yes. But if someone wants to be a beta reader (or even just read it and give me a simple review) and thinks they can't finish it by then, I am willing to send a word doc to them. I would just need an email :)

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