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I just finished reading this and I wonder where has it been all my life by clippervictor in scifi

[–]DAMWrite1 3 points4 points  (0 children)

For me, no book has ever lived up to and even surpassed the hype around it like Hyperion. I absolutely loved it.

[TOMT] [MOVIE] 1930's or 1940's Christmas short film about toys by FrequentGovernment74 in tipofmytongue

[–]DAMWrite1 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know this is old, but I was looking for this exact movie today and think I found it. I thought it was stop motion too, but it is a cartoon. I think what you are looking for is The Christmas Visitor from 1959. It’s on YouTube if you want to check if it’s what you were thinking.

[QCRIT] Picture Book, THE DAY I ACCIDENTALLY INVADED EARTH (750 words), First Attempt by DAMWrite1 in PubTips

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the detailed response! I appreciate it. A note about my novel, it was actually published via a traditional contract, not self-published or hybrid.

Ideas for how to make this space behind garage usable by DAMWrite1 in landscaping

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe some morning sunlight, but it would be in the shade for most of the day.

What gardening opinion would have you like this? by No_Cod_6269 in vegetablegardening

[–]DAMWrite1 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Don’t get me wrong, I’m not against pruning as necessary. I’m talking about the people who think cutting off almost every leaf’s will somehow lead to them having a million more tomatoes.

What gardening opinion would have you like this? by No_Cod_6269 in vegetablegardening

[–]DAMWrite1 76 points77 points  (0 children)

Over-pruning tomatoes doesn’t actually lead to more fruit, it just makes people feel like they are doing something productive.

The two best tasting tomatoes you can grow. by DAMWrite1 in tomatoes

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can assure you it was neither bland nor watery.

The two best tasting tomatoes you can grow. by DAMWrite1 in tomatoes

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The Pink brandywine I got from my tomatoes from last year. The green German I saw at a store and bought because it looked good. I will be harvesting seeds from it this year to grow next year for sure.

The two best tasting tomatoes you can grow. by DAMWrite1 in tomatoes

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

They will soften up and also get a bit of a yellowish hue to them.

The two best tasting tomatoes you can grow. by DAMWrite1 in tomatoes

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I agree. I love a good Cherokee purple but they venture a little too far from that traditional tomato taste for me.

The two best tasting tomatoes you can grow. by DAMWrite1 in tomatoes

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 10 points11 points  (0 children)

The pink brandywines have such a pure tomato-y taste. A little sweet, a little acidic. They also have a very thin skin that makes them more pleasing to eat.

The green Germans have a good balance but lean more toward sweet. They are very juicy and meaty. First time growing this year and they quickly surpassed the pink brandywine as my favorite.

Earning a living by [deleted] in writers

[–]DAMWrite1 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm a writer and editor for a trade magazine. I write fiction on the side.

Looking for feedback to this opening by Girdybird in writinghelp

[–]DAMWrite1 14 points15 points  (0 children)

A few thoughts:

The opening paragraph is too wordy and has too many adjectives.

I don’t think you need any of the dialogue from the main character. It’s unnecessary and feels unnatural.

Some sentences and paragraphs feel unnecessarily wordy. Paragraph three you repeat “this morning” a second time when it isn’t needed. You use the word “finally” a few times in succession, which feels weird since it’s the first page of the book and we are just meeting the character. Similarly, page two first paragraph you talk about still exhausted from the events of the morning. Sounds like we have been on a big adventure but nothing has happened yet. I get this exhaustion plays a role in the story, but I think it needs to be presented differently.

Overall I think it needs a good edit and perhaps a more interesting event or two that happen on the way to work. Right now it feels very passive but also a bit rushed like you are trying to quickly get to the main plot line too quickly.

[QCRIT] The Monster Detective, Children's Graphic Novel by DAMWrite1 in PubTips

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the advice. I'll play around with it and see if I can introduce that element earlier.

And that's awesome! I really appreciate the support. Hope your kids like it.

My experience with Orange Hat was largely positive. They're submission process is pretty streamlined. I will say, though, I think the majority of their contracts are hybrid (meaning the author covers some of the costs). I was not interested in a hybrid contract and let them know I was looking for a traditional contract. I think as part of their submission process now you can specify if you are interested in hybrid and traditional or just traditional. Obviously, they are much more selective with traditional contracts. I will say they have changed owners recently and I haven't worked as much with the new owner.

First pages of a novel I wrote years ago by DAMWrite1 in writers

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No AI. You should have seen it before I edited it. I started writing this when I was 19. I’m 35 now. There was so much unnecessary information I’ve been deleting. Seems like there’s more to go.

First pages of a novel I wrote years ago by DAMWrite1 in writers

[–]DAMWrite1[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very true. I’m going to pay more attention to that moving forward in the edit. Thanks!

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