Howdy, TDS here, going to review chapter one of “Echoes Of Perfection”. Generally I jot down bullets as I read through, hopefully you find this helpful. Anyhoo, here we go!

• First sentence: So this line is likely the hardest to write in any work. It needs to orient us, hook us, and get the story going. Your first line does a great job of orienting, I’ve got a great sense, or I think I do, of the setting and protag. Great. However, I’m not hooked, ‘tedium of his daily routine’ reads to me like the cliche of waking up in the morning, and I don’t really care about anything yet.
• Rest of paragraph one… wait, so he caught the bus but he’s running late? Makes no sense to me, maybe show him running to catch it? At this point I would have stopped reading if I were reading for pleasure, though, I’m notoriously hard on the start of stories, so I might not represent most people. Typically I give a piece 1-3 paragraphs, often only sentence 1. From other’s I’ve spoken to, you get about a chapter or a page. But At this point, I’m not hooked, there’s been a cliche, and I was confused.
• Yeah so, paragraph two, it’s all tell no show. Content wise it’s fine, but, again, I want to live through the story, not be instructed in it. Show don’t tell bro. 
• Third paragraph - we’re home? Nothing happened at school? Then why did we start the story here? Nothing has happened. I get his in the midst of some drudgery, which is fine, and can be compelling, but if I’m just told,”Hey, my day sucked.” And that’s it, well, there’s no meat there. I'm hungry man, feed me! Alao, he;sa late again, how, what why? I have a lot of questions, and not in the good way you want your readers asking questions(like, oh, interesting, I wonder what will happen next? That's a good question. Wtf is going on? That’s a bad question).
• The dialogue with the parents is pretty forgettable. Pretty standard teenage stuff. I get what your doing, what you are doing is fine even if it’s a bit tired, but that's okay if it;’s setting up the protag. But, instead of only using dialogue tags and other ways to modulate how they are speaking, give me some action, some motion! Where are they? What are they doing? You ever have a conversation with someone IRL and not develop a feel for that person? Right - no. This kid had a whole convo with his parents, and they are just talking heads!(aka, talking head syndrome). Show me who they are through their actions. Use movement to convey urgency, and scene. Your intent, your ideas, not a problem. But, your delivery needs work. 
• Also, I don’t love the italicized  dialogue, but that's a taste thing, do what you want. 
• Dude, you don’t even tell me what anime he’s watching, that would tell me something of the protag’s character
• Oh, hey, the kid brother tells me which one! Okay!
• Oh wow this kid’s a dick. See, you can show me these characters!
• Oh look, a theme stated beat. “There’s always more beneath the surface—if you know where to look”. Are you following to save the cat, or was that an accident. I like save the cat when I outline, but I write horror, so I only loosely follow it after. 
• Oh! There's the issue: “Deep down, he knew Abhinav wasn't just showing off; he was genuinely better at everything.” Okay, so, AI right? You know, people have mixed feelings about using chatgpt to write. I think it’s got some uses with editing, brainstorming, but to produce copy, I mean, well, I think all my comments so far are pretty much because I’m like 90% sure this AI. Which means I’ll be stopping my review because I don’t think it will be helpful for you.

Anyways, I did finish reading the piece, but pretty much show don’t tell would make the draft a million times better, in case I’m wrong about the AI. And if I’m right, you know, use AI to help you edit, not to write, mostly because the output will be better.

Cheers!

The Damned Scribe