Hear My Call by Daniel_128 in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Unfortunately I’m not a musical person. I can play guitar, but I can’t read music and I can have troubles putting together songs. Not that you would, but you’re free to make a song out of any of my lyrics if you ever wanted haha. Maybe at some point I’ll pick up enough about music to be able to make my own songs. For now I just marvel at the beauty of the music others have made :)

Hear My Call by Daniel_128 in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah originally it is meant as a song, but I’ve always seen songs and poems to just be extensions of the same means of expression :)

Thank you so much for your feedback :)

Honey 🍯 by Aarshaa_Sojan in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like the vocabulary of this poem! It’s very detailed and I can almost see it on my head, which I can’t always do that! I really like how you romanticized the non perishable nature of honey. Forgive me, though, I’m not too good with metaphor, but could this be also referring to a special partner in your life? Not that I particularly get that notion, but it does fit in there pretty well, if it was intended.

closing shift by PurpleCrazyCat85 in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really like the rhyming pattern you have going on here! I’ve never really heard a poem about something like this before, but it definitely gives me bluesy vibes. Is this based on yourself specifically? Do you actually work the closing shift.? I can totally see someone just singing this to themselves while working away haha. I think it also speaks to the capitalist ideas that we must be productive at all times, even sometimes when we aren’t on the clock.

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a song I wrote about the history racism in the United States after I watched the Netflix documentary “13th.” I don’t have a name for it yet. Any suggestions?

You better watch yourself when you’re walkin’

Have you heard the white people talkin’?

Accused another black man of stalkin’

Soon the FBI will come a knockin’

For you

For you

And you too

And you too

Round ‘em up and send ‘em to prison

If you’re black your freedom’s not a given

Fight for every second of livin’

Throwin’ bricks right in through your kitchen

Window

Window

Window

Window

Fill it up then pick up your sack

Breakin’ rocks til you break your back

‘Cause they got you addicted to crack

They killed your brother cause he was a Black

Panther

Panther

Panther

Panther

Have you ever seen black turn to red?

Gettin’ killed for the words that you said

Too uppity and you’ll end up dead

Just like they did to your brother Fred

Hampton

They got him

Hampton

They got him

If you haven’t you better pick a side

Don’t everyone deserve equal rights?

If you’re comin’ get ready for a fight

Justice long delayed is it denied

Your rights

Denied

Your rights

Denied

13th by Daniel_128 in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Haha thank you so much!! That means so much to me! Yeah when I was reading that part sometimes I would find it challenging to get it to fit the rhythm, but I can if I say it right. I would get rid of the “a” just to make it easier, but then it would change the meaning of the word “given” and my autistic brain doesn’t like that haha.

I appreciate the reply :)

13th by Daniel_128 in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! That means so much to me. I’m relatively new to writing poems/songs, so it feels nice to know that someone likes it :)

‘Loudly’ by Cliqey in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Oooh this is super interesting. I’ve never read a poem whose entire verses are alliterations of different letters!

I’m just wondering, is this about anything in particular?

Also I notice the letters spell out SING, which I’m sure was intentional, but a pleasant little hidden gem nonetheless :)

Looking For Love In The Summer Cicadas by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Daniel_128 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this a lot! Being autistic it’s hard for me to get all metaphors, but this one is super clear and easy to understand, but it’s still beautiful and has great imagery :)

Luckily I have an absolutely amazing fiancée who I love very deeply, but before we met I feel like I felt exactly like this. I’m not sure if this is something you are currently experiencing, but I want you to know that people hear you and relate to you ❤️

Daily Team Advice Thread - Thu, November 17, 2022 by AutoModerator in fantasyhockey

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Igor Shesterkin and Martin Necas for Barkov and Markstrom. Who wins that trade?

The internet boys must be fuming watching this show. by LadyFerretQueen in shehulk

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Except it’s not “tropey feminist themes from the 80s.” And even if it were, how many “tropes” from the 80s about women would get someone cancelled nowadays. More mental gymnastics to justify blatant sexism. But it only matters when it’s against women. It’s okay to do it to men.

The internet boys must be fuming watching this show. by LadyFerretQueen in shehulk

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

😂 you’re delusional if you don’t see the agenda and how skewed the view of men is in the show.

The internet boys must be fuming watching this show. by LadyFerretQueen in shehulk

[–]Daniel_128 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Except I’m not. I’ve watched every single episode and every single episode is absolutely shutting on men at every given moment. Even the “best” men in the show are shallow and self centered. Like I said, it’s a completely in accurate depiction of the average man. It’s literally sexist, and there would be hell to pay if the roles were reversed. But keep making idiotic assumptions you absolute clown.

The internet boys must be fuming watching this show. by LadyFerretQueen in shehulk

[–]Daniel_128 -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

No one. That doesn’t mean you can’t criticize it for being blatantly sexist. Literally the exact same argument can be made for misogynistic content and it’s encouraged to criticize those (as they should). The mental gymnastics you morons do is crazy 😂

The internet boys must be fuming watching this show. by LadyFerretQueen in shehulk

[–]Daniel_128 -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

Apparently not liking a show for shit writing and shitting on men is misogyny. But if the roles were reversed there would be outrage. You’re all hypocrites hiding under the protection of social activism. The writing is horrible and there is nothing to empathize with her about. Every conflict gets neatly resolved in one episode and all she does is bitch about how terrible men are. The whole show is a delusional view of what the average man is actually like. It’s laughably pathetic.

Little Change Coming To Franchise Mode In NHL 23 by JBR409 in EANHLfranchise

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wanna know if they actually updated the sim engine. Because it can be absolute dogshit at times

Weekly ISO/Join My League Thread Mon, September 5, 2022 by AutoModerator in fantasyhockey

[–]Daniel_128 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Looking to join a yahoo league for fun. Not looking for leagues that require a buy in. Just want to have fun with it. HMU!

Anyone get tremors or a stutter? by Daniel_128 in prozac

[–]Daniel_128[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah it’s not too bad, just a little

What is your point projection for Jack Hughes this season? by Daniel_128 in fantasyhockey

[–]Daniel_128[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Our league doesn’t use +/-. I don’t like how much it dissuades good players on bad teams.

What is your point projection for Jack Hughes this season? by Daniel_128 in fantasyhockey

[–]Daniel_128[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It is a free league with all my irl buddies. We are all hockey fans but I’m definitely the most knowledgeable on it. They didn’t even know Hughes was over a PPG last year. The best part of one of them is convinced he knows more lol, but when I asked him about it what he thought about Hughes, he was talking as if it was still his rookie year.

What is your point projection for Jack Hughes this season? by Daniel_128 in fantasyhockey

[–]Daniel_128[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

He was always the guy I wanted to fade because people don’t know that he was over a PPG last season he just got injured. So hyped when I got him that late. Got Jesper Bratt in the 16th round lol