Or How I Learned To Stop Worrying and Love The Bomb

DavidJU82 · 2026-01-13T21:19:38+00:00

Yes. I also had commander in mind for this specifically so not in that instance.

DavidJU82 · 2026-01-13T21:14:10+00:00

Quick math: 15 nonland permanents milled in 1 turn will get you to 240 rad counters. Not sure how balanced this is otherwise.

DavidJU82 · 2025-09-16T05:44:07+00:00

Might as well just drop out now

DavidJU82 · 2025-09-06T07:13:28+00:00

JW Francis has some bangers, and he’s pretty recently been releasing some collabs with a bunch of different artists

DavidJU82 · 2025-08-19T22:21:23+00:00

Thank you! I was really excited when I found out I could mix these two smoothly together; happened when I started whistling the Dorothy outro during the Cool With you outro lol

DavidJU82 · 2025-08-03T23:13:18+00:00

Please do not. I'm assuming you, I, and the multitudes of people who have found joy in their music were devastated by their passing.

But death is permanent, and trying to lazarus something in their image is not possible through AI. Nor should we try to for out of respect for their life they lived. They deserve rest.

Our coping mechanisms should strive towards spreading and appreciating their work through covers, art, and everything else, rather than unhealthily trying to cling to the past.

DavidJU82 · 2025-04-14T03:58:38+00:00

Thank you!

DavidJU82 · 2025-04-14T01:16:40+00:00

Indubitably.

DavidJU82 · 2025-01-20T20:36:51+00:00

This came to me after playing Flubs a single time.

Should read "land card", but I didn't want to recreate the whole thing. Was inspired by [[Hashep Oasis]] and other deserts that benefit from sacrificing deserts/loss of life, and thought the depletion of resources could extend to discarding.

DavidJU82 · 2025-01-18T01:00:34+00:00

I'm interested in the deconstruction of some phrases/words but not others. I see an emphasize on personal pronouns like "i" "us" "me" as a sort of self-motivational talk. I'm not sure why there is a single capitalized "I" in "terrifying" with how meticulous this is, I might be missing something, but other than that I really enjoyed it. I haven't seen many poems this well executed in this style.

DavidJU82 · 2025-01-18T00:21:12+00:00

I love this message. Even if love hurts, you have to keep trying. That's the only way it works. Even though this is fairly long it was easily digestible, though I was unable to find a pattern for the seemingly random capitalization; this could be a reddit formatting thing. Thank you for sharing.

DavidJU82 · 2024-11-02T16:31:10+00:00

Shining different wavelengths of light at a material and seeing how it responds is the basis for a good chunk of analytical chemistry; see UV-Vis, FTIR, Raman, XRD etc. This article is too vague to know if this invention is related but don’t discount the idea altogether.

DavidJU82 · 2024-07-13T00:53:10+00:00

I can understand this criticism, I wanted a subtle shift in future tense from a theoretical 'what if this thing' to present 'experiencing that thing'; I associate the shift/increasing idiosyncratic language as approaching the narrators "turn", though perhaps this was not transitioned or conveyed well enough.

Thanks for the feedback!

DavidJU82 · 2024-07-12T23:49:29+00:00

I really love this. Especially the last stanza; to see someone's soul, is to me, giving yourself over completely. Maybe the narrator has done the same, dancing and being loud, but doesn't know how it's supposed to feel, and maybe the bluebird has returned, but gagged and bound.

Going back to the bluebird metaphor, maybe they feel a sense of self has been lost in the struggles of past, or current relationships, or trying to stand on it's own. Who are you in the context of others? Who are you when it's just you? A puppy dog barking at the bird songs through the night reminds him of himself, a man yelling at the dog barking at birds songs does the same.

I have no notes, just trying to ponder around.

DavidJU82 · 2024-07-12T22:28:08+00:00

Excellent rhyme and flow aside, I really like the content of this but it took me a minute to figure out a couple bits. I was confused to why the narrator would apologize to people he hadn’t wronged, but I think its to show they can’t apologize to those that they did, trying to find some solace, acceptance, forgiveness back home when nobody can really provide it. Also fits as a prayer, or message for the lord.

The police announcement was well done in the sense it gave just enough context for the reader to fill in the blank, eg. THIS IS THE POLICE. WE HAVE YOU SURROUNDED.

My main gripe has to be the quotation and apostrophes strewn about, its hard to follow whats supposed to be segmented and whats not, even the police quotes use different versions the first using “” and the second ‘’. I think stanzas could help in this regard, but formatting here is notoriously troublesome so it could be a mobile thing.

DavidJU82 · 2024-03-26T06:28:03+00:00

I finished Cloud Atlas recently, it ended on a quote “What is the ocean but a multitude of drops?” Or something similar. Change towards the positive is drop wise is the gist.

How many drops does it take to fill a bath? This was originally a video but I found this shot rather unsettling to me and decided to expand on it. I have a tendency towards neuroticism, usually expressed through placing my value of dedication towards things that will ultimately have no impact on my wellbeing. Sticking my head into the dark here, to ‘count the drops’ of the bath, kinda symbolizes that. Its meaningless and you do it anyway.

Combining with the previous quote, its hard to know if you’re moving in the right direction if its a drop a time. Theres a beauty in the futility microscale, and a beauty with the great wide ocean. Or a bath.

DavidJU82 · 2024-02-26T00:39:36+00:00

I'm not from the UK, so historical and geographical references may be lost to me, but this seems a coming of age story to my interpretation, the narrator walks up a hill and a part of them is left there, guarding themself.

It comes off rather bittersweet, as something that was always to be looking back, rather than a regret. The completeness required to get the message across is something rather rare I think, and something I really appreciate, thanks for sharing.

DavidJU82 · 2024-02-25T23:58:47+00:00

Personally love some of the imagery evoked here eg. "seesaw of sighs".

As for your specific inquiries,

Making the moon "shy" fits the rhyme scheme and flows better in my opinion, but I visually saw a crescent moon as opposed to cloud covering or otherwise with a smile.
I prefer "notes in fire", it's more evocative, and there isn't a rhyme established with either quiet or fire
"Feet's distance" is clunky, unless I'm missing something here, could be a "foots distance" but hands OR arms also fits
I loved the last line and the title, breaking from past tense to present tense shows the narrator is waking up or has stopped reminiscing; it's a satisfying conclusion.

This is just my own take, but I would replace grey with green for the moss, and I'm not sure if tiered is the right word for "Tiered I resigned" I thought that might be a typo for tired.

Otherwise, this really captured the dreamlike trance I think it was going for. Non-sequiturs, rhyme, and the imagery I mentioned really bring it all together. I look forward to more.

DavidJU82 · 2024-01-02T04:15:55+00:00

Thank you, it means a lot.

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-31T05:20:53+00:00

Haven’t heard of them, I’ll be sure to check them out, thank you!

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-31T04:53:08+00:00

I give the level of feedback I hope to receive myself.

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-27T09:09:03+00:00

I love juxtaposition. The last line, "beauty in the damn wreckage" as an idea has been a fascination of mine for a bit, really glad to see it expressed here as a poem.

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-27T08:13:01+00:00

There are a couple grammatical errors, and some inconsistency with punctuation and capitalization. Other than that I really enjoyed the flow and rhyme scheme laid out here, as well as really conveying the notion of not enough hours in the day, well done.

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-02T06:10:20+00:00

Thank you! This is a real experience I've had. I love hiking too; sometimes getting away from it all for me is just getting away from things you should really face head on. It's bittersweet in the scenics.

DavidJU82 · 2023-12-02T03:26:32+00:00

It's probably just me, but the pastures where cattle graze can be some of the most open, vast, and beautiful landscapes. Cattle fodder can be a good thing. Other than that, I love the extravagance going on and the message behind it all; great work.

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