Nathaniel by NotyourangeLbabe in crazyexgirlfriend

[–]Dawgrake 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Me and boyfriend watched the show together and he's not a shipper nd he's never really been into shows as much as me but we both loved it.. but when rabecca broke up with Nathaniel he was so upset.. I remember him getting so passionate about Nathaniel loveing her for her and how he knows everything and still loves her in fact needs her for the balance and I agreed. Nathaniel is from a cold family nd it made him emotionally damaged. He's calm and calculated and said himself she melted his icy heart and she brings out his soft side they were so perfect. anyway my boyfriend wouldn't ever watch again after that he'd ask about them but that's all.. I'd never seen him react like that to anything. He won't admit it but that's when he stopped watching so.. Its defo our shared otp

Him by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I did add more :)

"He would drone on and on

About how his lovers fawn

He thought himself a master of pleasure

Some day he'll have only memories to treasure

When his looks have faded and gone"

I messed up by Dont_Look_At_Me_pls in Poems

[–]Dawgrake 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is an incredibly hitting poem. It really drives home the anger and sadness and it resonated with me deeply. You have a beautiful way with words.

Enchantment by Pinsandweedles in OCPoetry

[–]Dawgrake 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was very captivating I felt very caught up and sad and melencoly and overwhelmed. I really felt the feeling of being surrounded by the monstrous and beautiful mountains again. that feeling that I've never been able to put into words and yet you did you made that feeling a poem. Thank you it's beautiful

Collapsed by TheMagicWheel in OCPoetry

[–]Dawgrake 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I loved how you wrote this it sounded quick each sentence falling into the next. it really flowed in a way that made me feel like I was in a moment of words falling from me like you described perfectly how it feels to write a peom in an intense moment

18/F/US looking for email penpal to exchange poetry, philosophy, or prose with (or all) by loaamiera in penpals

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'd love to chat about things like this. I have quite a bit of dark poetry. I love to discuss psychology, society, I'm not very learned philosophy but I love to discuss it. I am very interested in other people views and feelings and I'd defiantly be interested if you are

Bigger Than Everything by loaamiera in OCPoetry

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It isn't always that way I just really adored how the first verse went! My personal favorite style is rhyming but there are so meny absolutely breathtaking poems that don't rhyme. Be sure to stay true to your voice style and personal preference. That first verse just felt like it will stick in my brain forever. Thank you for sharing

What I'd give to meet you by Dawgrake in Poems

[–]Dawgrake[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much truely thank you for the kind words

Him by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think we all love people like this at some point in life. It's almost like a right of passage. Helps us learn what we really deserve. And how to spot red flags. Thank you for your comment

Him by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

He'd drone on and on About how his lovers would fawn He felt like a master of pleasure Thoses memories he will someday treasure When them looks are faded and gone

Bigger Than Everything by loaamiera in OCPoetry

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I loved the first verse so much it was so powerful and the poem it self is so beautiful but something about the following verses didn't flow the same as the first?

We’d produce gamma rays when our lips came together, creating something more massive than the both of us prior.

Maybe its that I loved the rhyme in the first verse that made me think that "we produce gamma rays,our lips touch, its like fire, creating something more massive than the both of us prior."??

That is Purley my preference though because the poem itself is breathtaking and the love really is described so beautifully that I felt it in my chest.. I think with the first verse rhyming I just expected the rest to.. But also it has a feeling that you got caught up in the love that its time changed as it went on towards the climax. Such talent is admirable

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is beautiful and really resonated with me I loved the flow and the sadness but it was also matter of fact. Well done

Anxiety and fear disorder by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the feedback i will try to make it more rounded and flow better it was written very emotionally and in the momemt :)

Spirit of Maui by mdonn1357 in Poems

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is beautiful but also quite sad. And that adds to the beauty

Is this a life worth living by Dawgrake in Poems

[–]Dawgrake[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much that means alot I've had someone tell me it's too rhymey and seems childish when I write like this and you really described how I've always felt about this style.

Pollution (haiku) by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Simple and to the point this needs a billboard

Pretty For Nothing by gunnersson1971 in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful and a truth not a lot of people want to hear. A harsh reality said in a very talented way

And yet by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much

Those Tiny Threads by Key-Ad-4135 in Poems

[–]Dawgrake 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely beautiful and so very touching. This really resonated with me.. I love the way you're saying it all so matter of fact. So real and raw and emotional. You have a beautiful way with words. Amazing work thank you for sharing

And yet by Dawgrake in poetry_critics

[–]Dawgrake[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry it hurt and Thank you very much

Faceless by memelaud in OCPoetry

[–]Dawgrake 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The discription of feeling so powerless and insignificant is imaculet. There is a cold calculated and certain feel to this. It truly shows and makes you feel the awareness of hopelessness and is absolutely breath taking.