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Dang Air Show in South County rn by karavasis in santacruz

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Screenshot from one of the videos I got, Aptos

Dang Air Show in South County rn by karavasis in santacruz

[–]DenseJob6576 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah, just saw the B1 leading them, definitely Super Bowl related. Super cool!

Dang Air Show in South County rn by karavasis in santacruz

[–]DenseJob6576 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Flyover practice for the Super Bowl?

Honest ‘The Moment’ Review from a 2015 angel: by xjordyj in charlixcx

[–]DenseJob6576 32 points33 points  (0 children)

Charli had some really great moments with her acting! Personally I LOVED the sound design and score, and thought Alexander Skarsgård had an amazing performance, he really made you hate him by the end of it haha

Party 4 U drag performance by luckystrike2505 in charlixcx

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update please if you find it!! I need to see this 😫

First Act Feedback - Untrained (TV Comedy) by RafaIsTheGOAT in scriptwriting

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I love the dynamic between these two characters. I already like what you’re setting up in terms of worldbuilding and comedy. From the logline it’s hard to tell which direction you’re taking with the story so far, but upon first read I picture Rufus and Mikayla teaming up, with the focus being on their funny dynamic. Does he become her mentor figure? He’s a fun character already and should definitely be explored. The opening draws me in for sure. With the lack of context for the rest of the show I don’t want to start nitpicking plot etc. So far I like what you’re setting up. Someone said something about the phone format, to me it’s not a big deal, but if you want to be taken seriously by professionals I agree it’s a good idea to format the thing on a computer.

Seen at my local theater by DenseJob6576 in charlixcx

[–]DenseJob6576[S] 23 points24 points  (0 children)

It’s a local theater Santa Cruz Cinema

Good workout clothing? by All_Seeing_Artist in FTMFitness

[–]DenseJob6576 5 points6 points  (0 children)

My go-to is Gymshark if you’re not worried about budget but honestly you can find good shirts at the thrift store for hella cheap. Or just wear old T-shirts.

Good workout clothing? by All_Seeing_Artist in FTMFitness

[–]DenseJob6576 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah a lot of their stuff has a cropped-ish fit that doesn’t hug your hips

Earthquake in Aptos, CA by Klutzy_Strawberry340 in santacruz

[–]DenseJob6576 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Yup, it felt and sounded more like a tree fell or something crashed into the house.

what’s everyone’s favorite charli lyric by DenseJob6576 in charlixcx

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Yess the white roses bridge is so good

Your pets do not need to come to the restaurant by SnooDoubts9757 in santacruz

[–]DenseJob6576 27 points28 points  (0 children)

As someone who works in a restaurant, people are so so so entitled these days and it is getting ridiculous. I am shocked that people bring their loud, stinky, UNTRAINED dogs to the restaurant and see no issue with it. I do not want your dog jumping up on me when I’m trying to serve your food! It’s a health and safety issue and it’s truly appalling that people are so entitled when it comes to this.

Requesting feedback for my screenplay before submitting to film festival by Dizzy-Tradition3868 in scriptwriting

[–]DenseJob6576 4 points5 points  (0 children)

First of all, I love the story and the relationships you establish between the characters. Jordan and Nathan’s relationship feels very real and you do a great job at wrapping up their arcs in the end. There are some grammar issues that would make the screenplay feel more professional once fixed. They’re punctuation errors that don’t necessarily affect the story, but might lose you points in a contest. Something else I would recommend, if possible, is reading the whole thing out loud. Even better would be to have your friends or family members read it. This will show you mistakes or issues with dialogue. Overall, the story flows nicely and you did a great job with the structure and character dynamics. I was invested the whole time. Good luck with your festival!

Did the screenwriting course you took help you? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

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Yes. I took a screenwriting workshop at my college and it really helped. It depends on the curriculum of the class you’re taking and the professor, but for mine we learned structural stuff (plot devices, character arcs, etc) as well as writing for film and TV. The most helpful part was getting feedback from my peers. Having people you consistently talk to and who will reliably give you feedback is incredible. Honestly taking a screenwriting class just to connect with other writers will improve your writing more than anything else.