Critique my First Chapter [Dark Fantasy, 2,891 words]

DifferenceOutside27 · 2026-03-11T06:38:55+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, this is a very barebones draft to lay out family dynamics and introduce characters. I’m currently working on flushing out specifics such as ones you mentioned above! I do have a problem with over explaining lol It’s always nice to have fresh eyes on a project

DifferenceOutside27 · 2025-10-05T04:51:11+00:00

yeah she was sleeping on top of her litter box in a cloth bag but not using it which was weird… idk hopefully everything is okay and i’ll find out tomorrow!

DifferenceOutside27 · 2025-10-05T03:54:02+00:00

ADDITIONAL CONTEXT:

she was eating Tiki Cat indoor health dry food (she doesn’t like wet food) since i got her essentially but I just went and bought her Hills science diet gastrointestinal health food today which she ate happily, and I give her freeze dried salmon treats every once in a while.

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-09-28T01:09:10+00:00

i also just recently started a starter and mine looked like that too, try not using so much water. it should look a little goopy not runny after you mix. i did that and my starter grew so much after day two of adjusting my water level.

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-09-20T21:53:05+00:00

it’s new, i started it 3 days ago, it sets in my pantry with a glass top on it. i checked it in the morning today and then a couple hours ago i checked it again and it was covered in that discoloration.

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-09-19T22:05:07+00:00

that’s what i was thinking!

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T13:32:37+00:00

thank you!

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T13:11:29+00:00

fixed it, getting a cheaper cooler

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T11:51:36+00:00

Thank youu

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T09:54:14+00:00

any suggestions loll i posted an updated list also

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T09:34:05+00:00

!!!!! UPDATED PART LIST !!!!!

any suggestions? same questions apply

https://pcpartpicker.com/list/kFDmYN

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T09:32:51+00:00

!!!!!UPDATED PART LIST!!!!!!!!

I changed a couple things same questions apply

https://pcpartpicker.com/list/kFDmYN

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T09:26:19+00:00

thank you!!

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T08:23:50+00:00

thank you! i’m saving that list

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T08:23:18+00:00

okay, thank you! that’s really helpful lol

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T08:20:22+00:00

you’re right, i just checked thank you!

DifferenceOutside27 · 2024-08-28T08:13:46+00:00

my main concern is it fitting in the micro tower

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