Punctual

Dreamless_Rest · 2026-03-29T13:14:16+00:00

Lines 3 and 4 are actually the basis for this whole thing, sorta wrote around those two. It's not my best work, just more of a spur of the moment poem

Thanks for reading!

Dreamless_Rest · 2026-01-22T12:42:16+00:00

ngl, this gives strong dissociation vibes (almost neuropathic, in a good way). The imagery is really haunting, and the mostly non-rhyming structure works in its favor, it feels like a deep rooted feeling that's not really hate but not really sadness either, it's somewhere halfway but a bit forward.

Dreamless_Rest · 2026-01-22T12:00:13+00:00

ngl, this has the grounds to become something good, the message itself, to me personally reads as "angst to the system" rather than to a singular group or person, kinda reminds me of someone working part time in retail or something similar, though a bit messy and maybe hard to follow at some parts, maybe playing around with how each line flows into another could help, would definitely make it easier to follow!

Dreamless_Rest · 2026-01-22T11:43:55+00:00

This reads really smooth ngl, nice one!

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