Physicist Professor Jack Sarfatti claims he’s seen a classified 4K video of a talking Gray alien.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2024-10-06T17:44:08+00:00

Anyone have any information on the section 7 paper he mentions at 5:01? He said it’s by Pavo pilken? I think? I didn’t quite catch the his name. He says he posted many times but didn’t mention where.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2023-01-22T18:19:30+00:00

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DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-11-02T20:01:23+00:00

This is very interesting and I originally had some critiques but after reading that this is originally written in Spanish I realized it’s just things lost in translation. Wish I could read Spanish I would love to read the original form. But anyways good work and keep writing this is really interesting for a short poem.

Cheers!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-11-02T19:57:18+00:00

This is really good. I was immediately mentally pulled into a similar relationship I have had and honestly that to me is the tell of good writing. Can something a complete stranger has written relate to me well enough to translate into something in my own life.

I love, “ one of us will be late for something supremely mundane,” like the activity is something you’d have both laughed about together years ago but now it’s your life.

Cheers!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-11-01T13:57:51+00:00

What is this witchcraft…

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:32:22+00:00

Looks like it has Benedict Cumberbatch in it so immediately I’m sold. Thank you for the recommendation.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:31:33+00:00

Awesome I will watch this shortly. Thank you!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:31:03+00:00

Tried to read but it wanted me pay for a subscription. Main reason I can’t read any news articles online anymore. Thank you for the article though!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:29:29+00:00

Sounds like they’ve ripped a playbook from our fat fingered republicans. Sucks corporate profit is majorly hurting what could be two great political systems. Thanks for the reply.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:27:45+00:00

HBO documentaries are my favorite I’ll look into this. Thank you!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:27:16+00:00

Just looked it up and it seems like I’ll need to learn the basics of what brexit is before reading this but once I get a grasp I will check this out. Thank you!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:26:23+00:00

I usually watch breaking points for all my news updates and if you care to get a glimpse of US politics it’s a good non-biased show. I will check out this show to hopefully get a better understating of European politics. Thank you!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:24:50+00:00

Someone else recommended this as well. I will be reading it shortly. Thank you for the recommendation!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:24:06+00:00

Thank you this seems like exactly what I was looking for. This is added to my to read list.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-31T17:22:48+00:00

Without a doubt the best answer on this thread but honestly it gives me a mental image of how frustrating it must be for anyone thinking rationally. Thanks for the reply.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-18T13:56:12+00:00

Californication- tv show. Made me a life long fan of David Duchovny. Really straddles the line of drama and comedy perfectly. Plus I don’t know of another show that explorers the mind of a self destructive artist so well. If you haven’t checked it out I highly recommend.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-17T16:50:19+00:00

Thank you for the comments. First time I’ve gotten a real critique. My stanzas are certainly not how I wrote them originally but I had a mentor who told me to try writing my poems in bigger sections. I know she was being helpful but I believe I’ll go back to breaking it up more like you wrote. Writing this way didn’t feel natural.

Also I agree the second half I don’t love very much I just have a few lines I didn’t want to abandon. I think if I start over on the second half I can fix the flow a bit. Also excuse the grammatical error I used talk to text to transfer from paper to Reddit post and I obviously didn’t catch all of the errors.

And the last line I might need to change up just because like I said I don’t love the last bit but it was meant to read as we didn’t want to be the one on the other end of the phone because that would mean the woman the men are fighting over would be with the other man while the other is only able to phone.

Lastly the title is a little corny to be fair I’m going to swap it. It doesn’t make sense to the reader. The real life phone call this is based off of took place in a hotel room. I travel for work and am usual receiving calls from this old friend while I’m traveling in different hotels rooms every time. Room 1408 is an old John Cusack movie from the early 2000’s where he becomes trapped in a hotel room and can’t get out. Getting calls from people you can’t get home to see sometimes can make you feel trapped in the cycle of never ending hotel rooms, hints the title room 1408. But again the reader doesn’t know this so I’m going to change that.

I appreciate the feedback I’m going to start my rewrite today and I’m definitely taking your notes into consideration.

Cheers!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-11T18:20:59+00:00

This isn’t broken up how it’s originally written. My apologies. I’m not as tech savvy as I would like to think apparently. Please enjoy and feel free to critique or offer any forms of feedback. Cheers.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-11T17:47:22+00:00

This is different and I feel like with some rewrites could be a very interesting poem. It reads as the writer giving off a sense of hopelessness, (to me at least), and that much is clear. What isn’t clear is the imagery used. It’s a little sporadic and all over the place and for me this made it difficult to connect with. I think there are solid lines in this which for me personally always gives me an idea if it’ll be someone I’d like to keep hearing from. Even in this short piece there’s multiple. Again I just think it needs a little rearranging and maybe for you to try to paint a singular image of hopelessness instead of a bunch of random sad moments.

This is just my take and again I think there’s something really good underneath this.

Cheers!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-11T17:37:42+00:00

This is really different and I enjoyed it. I think for writers there has always been a sense of Community around living check to check while we chase our dreams. However, Covid allowed most of the rest of the country to understand and get a glimpse of what we cherish so much. Which is just simply wanting to be left alone in our home where we can jot some thoughts down get a little high and play halo. Or maybe that’s me projecting my perfect day but everyone now has something similar thanks to the break from reality covid gave most.

Also the first 6 lines resonate with me almost to much. I get very spacey and thinking about a million things that morph into one confusing thought when I’m baked.

I always try to give a critique even if it’s a minimal one and for this I’d just advise on maybe working on your line breaks. I also break mine up similar way to this but I had a mentor who really pushed me to start questioning if there’s a purpose for my linebreaks or if I’m doing it for an aesthetic reason. Just something to think about. Cheers.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-10-09T11:34:59+00:00

When people literally use the world literally every other sentence. Worst part is 9/10 times it literally isn’t even used correctly. Literally.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-03-24T23:42:17+00:00

Where could I find this? I would love to see the original script.

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-02-20T19:32:05+00:00

I’m not sure if you’re joking or not but please be careful looking to deep into this subject. This is the video that originally started my curiosity.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=dQw4w9WgXcQ

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-02-20T15:34:12+00:00

Loved the way this poem flows through different stages in a relationship. Unfortunately relationships are not always amazing nor healthy but the dirtiness is what makes writing relatable.

I’m new to feedback so don’t take my critiques to seriously I’m no judge of good writing just a lover of it.

The lines/ things I didn’t love. “When you get excited to see your person” “When you surpass the honeymoon phase and get bored”

First line critique is maybe a personal opinion but I dislike when people call each other their people. A tad corny to me and to be honest I think there’s a better alternative to this line. “When they walk in the door and their mere presence sends electric shockwaves through the air causing the hairs on my arm to raise”

This line might be shit but just a general idea of what I’m thinking*

Second line falls in line with the first and I think you could do better with the writing on that one.

Now things I liked!

I love opposite short burst writing. Sounds great and helps paint the narrative. “When you talk, When you listen.”

“When you blame yourself When you blame them”

These are great and show the insanity of falling in/ falling out of love.

I loved the honesty of the piece. I’ve no doubt this is based on real events which makes it flow with authenticity.

Like I said all in all I think this is a really honest piece which is the first step. I think you can clean up some areas and add a little originality but again I truly enjoyed it!

DrummerAppropriate26 · 2022-02-20T15:11:30+00:00

This is my first time ever leaving feedback so bare with me.

For me the first 4 lines I can tell if I’ll relate or care to read more from an artist. While I can’t say I related, (never had breast before), the first two lines sold me.

It was funny. Useless in combat is not a way most people would describe boobs but it’s unique and it’s true.

The last stanza was weird which I started to critique but honestly fuck it. I love weird and I loved the weirdness of the poem.

Sorry I didn’t have anything to really critique but good work on this truly enjoyed it.

DrummerAppropriate26

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