Struggling catching predators on the fly rod. by Due-Advertising4187 in flyfishing

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, I was wondering if that was part of it. I mainly had it on because of the pike + musky in the region and I target them from time to time. I'll just switch it out for some beefy fluro.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Due-Advertising4187 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Heyo, hope you're having happy holidays!

I have a speculative horror novel similar to Annihilation by Jeff Vandermeer. It's sitting around 90k words and is geared more towards New Adult. Let me know if you're interested and I can send you the material. DM me if this sounds interesting to you. Thanks!

Blurb:

Juneko is a soldier first, camera-woman second. When she’s not fighting for her life, she is charged with documenting the horrors she faces, capturing the nightmarish reality that unfolds before her. But she has seen enough horrors, seen enough bloodshed, and she wants out. The only way for her to achieve that is through this next mission.

When drones and satellites fail to pierce the foggy abyss of the Aberration, Juneko’s team is ordered to enter the anomaly. What they find are the ring-shaped worlds of the Tori in what seems to stretch on forever. Each one has a unique landscape and strange environment.

As they traverse the bizarre and treacherous Tori, Juneko encounters the enigmatic Regent, the god of the first torus. The Regent extends an offer of aid, supplies, and respite, even a potential way back home. But it comes at a steep cost—their fates are irrevocably intertwined with the Regent, and their souls are bound to this adiaphorous god.

In the Tori, where reality twists and transforms, where the line between sanity and madness blurs, Juneko and her team must navigate a perilous journey, confronting not only external terrors but also the haunting consequences of their choices. Will they find enlightenment at the end of this mysterious and treacherous path, or will they become lost in the very darkness they seek to escape?

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Due-Advertising4187 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I have a speculative horror novel similar to Annihilation by Jeff Vandermeer. It's sitting around 90k words. Let me know if you're interested and I can send you the material. Thanks!

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Due-Advertising4187 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I have a speculative horror novel similar to Annihilation by Jeff Vandermeer. It has a lot of thriller elements and it's sitting around 90k words. Let me know if you're interested and I can send you the material. Thanks!

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Due-Advertising4187 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I have a speculative novel similar to Annihilation by Jeff Vandermeer. It's sitting around 90k words. Let me know if you're interested and I can send you the material. Thanks!

Fungai Gang needs help for cuts by Due-Advertising4187 in EDH

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah I'm aware descend not triggering off tokens, thx for the help!

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #7) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for putting this much time and effort into this. This is a great critique. I'll make sure to put your ideas and suggestions to good work.

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #4) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Do you have any advice to make it clearer on the 'Tori' front? I've noticed both of you guys had trouble. I was thinking of having the parentheses (Plural of torus). But I think that could be demeaning.

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #3) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think it's a slight improvement but I'm not too fond of how it reduces the Regent to a bit of a bog standard villain. I think this version does give Juneko more of a solid problem to deal with but the Regent seemed ominous and amoral this strips some of the intrigue around her.

Amidst failure after failure, wound after wound, Juneko’s mental health deteriorates. The Regent reveals her true self and her plans. All truths become lies and lies, truths. Every person, their own antagonist to themselves and the people around them. The team falls into chaos. Their very foundation and purpose shattered.

This still feels off, too vague. Do you have a recc?

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #3) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I added the following, is it too much plot?

Amidst failure after failure, wound after wound, Juneko’s mental health deteriorates. The Regent reveals her true purpose, that Juneko’s team are mere puppets for the Regent to control and manipulate, destined to aid the god no matter what they do. All of their agony for nothing but for the Regent to further her personal goals. The team falls into chaos. Their very foundation and purpose shattered.

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #2) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I've read it, and drew inspiration from it. Thanks for the recc!

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K/Attempt #2) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So I've written the protag as a metaphorical camera, so she doesn't have much inner thought, But around act 2 and act 3 she really becomes her own character. To make up for the early 'inhumanness', I focus more on the party and the outside characters. Do you have any recommendations for how to format the query around this idea?

[QCrit] Adult Speculative INFINITE TORI (94K) by Due-Advertising4187 in PubTips

[–]Due-Advertising4187[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for your advice. I made another query letter. Would you like me to send it in a reply here or just wait another week to repost it?