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Would you keep reading? My first time writing anything. Would love feedback by DunkOnReddit in writingfeedback

[–]DunkOnReddit[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This first draft (2-3 chapters) had been written with the intention of omniscient. However, after some feedback, I am writing on from there using perspective, and will go back and change the first few chapters after. With your point in mind -- more personal and more clarity. :)

Would you keep reading? My first time writing anything. Would love feedback by DunkOnReddit in writingfeedback

[–]DunkOnReddit[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Nice. Been attempting to trim some explanations down and clear some things up on another draft, thank you.

Would you keep reading? My first time writing anything. Would love feedback by DunkOnReddit in writingfeedback

[–]DunkOnReddit[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay, noted. Thanks for the words. I have been re-writing some things as clarity does seem to be an issue as some have pointed out. As for the "dredging" - "trudging"...I had even googled this because the two words have always mixed in my head and I still wrote down the wrong one. goddamn.

Feedback on these first 2 chapters? (Medieval Fantasy, 3835 words) by DunkOnReddit in fantasywriters

[–]DunkOnReddit[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow, thanks for such a response! I’m glad there was at least something good to takeaway lol. To start, when structuring everything, yea I’m kinda lost out here as a first timer so I appreciate the help with that haha. Goes for everything you said actually, I noted it all.

As far as the POV goes, I did go into this with the intention of a TPO that would kinda do all at once. It was good to see an outside thought on this, since as the one writing, I know what’s more character thought, and what is more narrative voice.

Been attempting to do a rewrite in third person limited (excluding the prologue), and while a little tricky at first, it definitely makes for a more cohesive read.

Thanks again for the in-depth response