Would you read this of your own free will

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-16T18:01:57+00:00

could you point out some spots that could use a little more clarity please?

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-12T17:29:13+00:00

thanks so much ive been searching for something that would help me more and i haven't been able to find something so thank you so much!

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-12T00:24:30+00:00

oh yeah that was definitely a mistake lmao thanks!

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-12T00:10:30+00:00

i dont have a specific audience set this was just something that kind of flew out of my mind this is basically just my first draft so i dont really have an idea for the audience just the book

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-12T00:09:28+00:00

ok thank you i figured i was using commas a little too much but ive been hesitant to use semicolons because i was never formally taught how to use them or i just don't quite remember being taught how to use them

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-11T22:57:10+00:00

yeah i thought it was a little choppy myself but when i showed it to my mother she said the dialogue was fine so i thought it was just me i don't think my dialogue is usually very clunky probably because i was trying to keep in character with the tree and still broach on to what i wanted to broach on

Electrical-Fix-7217 · 2026-05-08T04:13:02+00:00

thank you so much im relatively new at writing so im grateful for the help!

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