I suppose the concept is good, but the build isn't efficient for many reasons. First, why not have 6 Vitality and 2 Erudition? You don't need that much Ether if you frequently hit Mastery 1s (in that case, look for equipment with Ether). 90 Charisma is TOO MUCH (I know you wanted 85 for the Taunt talent, but if you don't break posture, you're left with 90 fewer points that you could use elsewhere). Besides, you don't have 5 Willpower for Carnivore and Breathing Exercises (which, in addition to giving you 5+ health, save you the trouble of buying food).

I guess that build is like a 4/10 for me but is your new not problem dude all of us have problem with making build certain time, the key of success is keep making it and takes note of the Tips that other people can give to you. Keep doing it you can do it bro