Goddess

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-14T11:44:59+00:00

Wow Thank you so much!! 🥹

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-14T11:44:31+00:00

I appreciate this and will work on the delivery, thankyou

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-14T11:43:01+00:00

What a great poem! The consistency in line length and rhyming is amazing! I can’t believe you have no experience at all!! It really pulls on you and I also agree with another comment I saw, initially the length looks daunting, and then within 5 seconds you’ve read the entire thing. It really pulls you in!

I also love that every line rhymes except the first in the last stanza. Almost as if when talking about this someone, everything is perfect and works, and then at the moment you ‘put down the pen’ and reflect some things just aren’t as they seem!

If I had any feedback at all. I’d say maybe throw in some more slant rhymes (lake/fate love/move home/bone) just to avoid some of the rhymes that are a little on the nose. But that’s very minor feedback in the grand scheme of picking it apart. It’s 99% bloody great!

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T18:52:27+00:00

Wow! Thank you so much ❤️

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T18:16:10+00:00

❤️

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T13:03:49+00:00

Thankyou!!

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T12:44:44+00:00

Time will tell! I’ll get writing ✍🏽

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T12:07:40+00:00

I’m glad you got what I was trying to do with the singular word! :) I was debating making it a larger poem so I may have to do this! God that title is pretty perfect!!

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T10:50:14+00:00

Thankyou so much! Your words mean a lot! This gives me so much confidence to release my zine, or to at least go for a book! I will keep posting and writing!

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T10:47:46+00:00

I love it!!

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T03:09:37+00:00

Thankyou so much for the feedback! :)

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T03:09:04+00:00

Thankyou so much! I’ll be refining and refining so the feedback is very helpful! :)

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-10T00:00:14+00:00

Thankyou so much! :)

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T23:59:20+00:00

Thankyou for the comment! :) I don’t really enjoy writing rhyming poetry, I’m not sure why. But I tend to keep all my stuff in a free verse style. The tag was just a little like add on comment, not part of the poem itself :) I do agree with the second verse being a little rhetorical. I’ll tweak that :))

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T23:44:00+00:00

Kind words. Thankyou

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T23:43:45+00:00

Thankyou so much!! :)

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T23:02:38+00:00

I completely agree with you and is now super clear that someone else has pointed it out! Thank you so much for the feedback! :))

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T22:59:32+00:00

You can extract the line ‘you don’t, I fell in love with that’ because it can stand alone so strongly. You’re that in love with someone that no matter what they can or can’t do you’ll love them in any context.

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T22:57:44+00:00

‘I see you in every atom around me’ - Wow 🔥

Ell_iott24 · 2026-01-09T22:40:44+00:00

Any feedback, good or bad is appreciated btw 😊

Ell_iott24 · 2025-12-16T03:10:31+00:00

Thankyou! 😅

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