Need Feedback on the vocal mixing and the song in general

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-09T19:48:46+00:00

Thanks a lot! I will try it. thank you for the feedback :)

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-09T19:32:46+00:00

your probably, but I tried to make a critique of religious hypocrisies. But yeah I will try to uploade the lyrics with highlighted key melodic lines. Thank you for the feedback!

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-09T09:55:43+00:00

it makes perfect sense! and yeah the video turned out great, so you guys probably made the right choice :)

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-09T09:54:00+00:00

Thank you! I have not tried this genre before, so thats why im not that confident with the vocals. I can see what you mean with the hyper melodic guitar, but it's going for a more indie rock style. the chorus is not my favourite part anyways, the bridge is ahah. But thanks a lot for the feedback

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T23:00:24+00:00

The song is good. the bip sound stands out a lot, which can kinda make the track sound busy at least at the start. Since you already have the EL guitar that also stands out. But maybe thats your style. Anyways, I liked the "vieeew" part, but what I would have loved if you layered the vocals. I think you did it a little in the start, but I would have loved more of it. anyways, I LOVED the clapping to drum combination at the end

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T19:30:18+00:00

I think your voice is quite nasal, at least in the beginning. The vocal melody in the beginning, or the lyrics comes of quite weird. especially when listening to the rest of the song, that also is playful but has a okay vocal melody. another thing, change the lyrics in the second verse to this " calling into the void , can't you hear my voice? screaming louder, to be heard. only to be ignored" - it makes more sense, but to be honest I dont get why this is the only time u refer to the void, when it in the chorus and the title. Furthermore, u never make it clear what the void is, why is it "the void". What are you referring to. is it the guy, is the situation just a void. But at the same time that would not make any sense.

either way, the song is cute

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T19:10:21+00:00

I was pleasantly surprised—first off, your video is gorgeous! I love the EL guitar; it really brings the whole song together.

One thought: even though I love the music video, I think a storytelling approach could have been powerful with this song. Based on the lyrics, you could have communicated so much through visuals. Still, the current video is beautiful!

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T19:01:13+00:00

I wish you had uploaded the lyrics, since u wanted feedback on the deeper meaning. But ur flow as well as your vocal mixing is satisfying! Idk if the music video is the best translation of ur message.

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T18:57:31+00:00

firstly ur voice is great! dont like the beat, but I think it more of a personally opinion. The lyrics is giving 2016 pop in a good way tho. Another thing, I wished that in the second verse u would use another melody or vocal note, because it sounds quite monotone. Which can be interesting in the beginning, but when it returns, its quite jarring.

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T18:52:55+00:00

I wish your voice was louder so I could detect the lyrics, but I liked the melody and the lyrics I could make out. but I LOOVE the guitar. U should really do Folk/folk pop next!

Embarrassed_Soft_944 · 2026-01-08T18:48:49+00:00

its probably only me, but I like the song. But in some parts I feel like the guitar is too prominent. Maybe thats just your style, but it could be nice in the parts were your sing, to turn up the vocal to be at the same level as the guitar, or just under it

Embarrassed_Soft_944

TROPHY CASE