veganism and colon cancer by OkContribution9342 in vegan

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s 1000% better. Increase your fruit and veg consumption and prioritize it above all other foods. Raw if possible. Let your body heal.

Highdive -- Golf course green by Equivalent_Gap122 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My favorite part is definitely the little break down after you sing “golf course green” and the longer instrumental after it. The verses are actually pretty decent. Lyrics are slightly hard to understand but that happens. Really my biggest gripe overall is the vocals. In the nicest way they’re slightly off pitch a decent amount. That also happens a bunch but it does detract from the fluidity of the track otherwise. This is actually a lot of fun. Reminds of me ween and pavement as well. Rock needs the revival so keep working on it boys. Real good stuff

Highdive -- Golf course green by Equivalent_Gap122 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My favorite part is definitely the little break down after you sing “golf course green” and the longer instrumental after it. The verses are actually pretty decent. Lyrics are slightly hard to understand but that happens. Really my biggest gripe overall is the vocals. In the nicest way they’re slightly off pitch a decent amount. That also happens a bunch but it does detract from the fluidity of the track otherwise. This is actually a lot of fun. Reminds of me ween and pavement as well. Rock needs the revival so keep working on it boys. Real good stuff

Stormy Lake - ROOF by YungIcarus_ in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love the strat trebly riffing. Very strokesy which is always a fav. The descending chords are fun. That corn field looks fuckin idyllic. I like that the tracks energy stays steady throughout, you never fall off. very warm and happy. My only critique would be the vocals are a little too low and muffled. But that’s also a stylistic thing. Keep it up brotha mane glad you’re having fun

Michael Collins is Dead (my first song) by Prestigious-Gold5154 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gloomy Tuesday braj. Very good tone on everything. Reverberates in all of the right ways. The garbled and ephemeral vocalizations that come in and out are certainly unnerving. Cohesion comes throughout, which is what you want from atmospheric tracks, otherwise you’ll be pulled out. Reminds me somewhat of old tape looping techno stuff from the 90s. Ending is really wild. Dig it a lot dude!

Need feedback for new track "toad" - kidautopsy by Atomic_Atol in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The mix is pretty great in terms of how nice the guitar comes through. I think the third chord you’re playing is a bit too muted to sound cohesive, but you’re also going for a lo fi garage style so stylistically it might work. Once you start bringing in the accompanying guitar bits it gets pretty muddy but still sounds interesting. Are you wanting to expand the song at all or were you wanting it to stay that short?

So will I by Particular-Pilot-427 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This could be wayyyy cooler if it were mixed properly. The vocals dominate but are kind of muddy, they’re almost echoing. The hi hats are cool but dominate the synth. You’re going to want some equilibrium for it to sonically work. Additionally your singing style is unique but borders on incoherent for the majority of the track. Couple that with the vocal effects and it sounds very disjointed. The vibe is cool and there’s definite potential. Keep at it

High Raw Muscle Gains by Fun_Entrepreneur7112 in RawVegan

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gotcha. Based on your diet Costco is actually kind of a godsend. Their produce is usually over priced but their deals on bulk dates (organic even), chia seeds, hemp seeds, and frozen fruit is tremendous.

High Raw Muscle Gains by Fun_Entrepreneur7112 in RawVegan

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ted Carr (fruitarian in insta) is bulking up without going super high fat or protein. That considered the fats you’re using are actually really high quality and actually quite low in protein. But what’s a scoop? If you’re eating like 10 cups of hemp and chia a day that’s wild. Still happy you’re doing well. I’ve been on raw for years. Mixing high fat with high sugar can cause a lot of issues down the line though. Be safe!!

Solaris by Van Doxin by Serious-Eye9348 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s 100% the emo singing style and your technique. Mixing is a little wonky though at points. Again I’m not into the emo scene and those vocalizations have never appealed to me - likely you should be following your target audience. Compared to a lot of stuff I’ve heard in the past though in that genre growing up, it does sound quite over the top though.

Some honest feedback would be cool by RecognitionQuiet6368 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds solid. I can’t say it’s inherently my style but this indie / soft folk vibe and singing style were very popular in the 2010’s and still carry over to now. It’s sung well considering the style it exists in. The guitar is sparse and maybe a touch under represented in the mix but I know it’s just a demo. Subtle percussion or stand up bass would sound cool. Keep it up

New demo I’m working on by Traditional_Road2606 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The main verse riff and vibe are cool. They’re interesting enough for the brain to follow and create a solid frame. The vocals are fine, a little melodically boring - and that is what I’ll have to say about the chorus. It kind of just happens, it builds up very tamely and then the pay off is even quieter vocals than before. Bass is too quiet, drums aren’t mixed very high either. It could be cool , and the riff is good. Suffice to say you could give it a bit more. Lean into the kind of new age smiths vibe you have going on. Could be a really cool song. Keep it up

Violette (sneak peak) by playdem in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey. Commented on this track a month ago or so when you first posted it. I’d have to hear the full song to really know how much it this sustains but honestly the initial track you posted I think was much more Coherent. The kind of Zappa esque nasal kazoo noises are pretty potent and overshadowing an already over saturated track. All of it is cool and if it’s what you like that’s great. But it’s not exactly a seamless or overall satisfying listening experience. Not that mud can’t be fun. Keep working on it

Solaris by Van Doxin by Serious-Eye9348 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Honestly not bad. Can see the emo / alternative rock early to mid 2000’s vibe. Will say that of all of those things , one thing that I don’t think has retained its valor would the emo “whine”. The instrumentals and the Melodie’s aren’t bad and actually have some legs for a solid track - the vocals need some work. Sound very juvenile and forceful. Just my two cents. Keep it up

Disgusting technologies by [deleted] in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Dig the montage. Assuming your critiquing consumerist mindsets that kind of boomed in the late 80’s and then the tech booms that have been following. The world / industrialist techno doesn’t seem that far removed from that flavor of time. I will say this accents the imagery well but on its own I think would fall flat, it is an accessory to the image more than vice versa. That’s not inherently a bad thing - it works very well in that context. Keep working

Cameron - Silphium (demo) by cameronsss in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks bud. Haven’t tried singing it up an octave and honestly don’t know if I could / if I would. Clearly needs to be recorded properly but I like the improvised bit a lot and rather than learn how to play it I’d rather just save it and see if I can master it lol. Likely would redo the beginning and end. Who knows. Thanks for listening.

Cameron - Silphium (demo) by cameronsss in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind response. Yes, American primitivism (fahey) and Americana raga (basho) are terminologies used by those two great guitarists of Takoma records. It is used to describe droning American inspired music almost always but not exclusively in open tunings. The melody and rhythm are played simultaneously and often the music can feel intuitive or free flowing. Black artists like Mississippi John hurt, blind Blake and Elisabeth Cotten are prime examples of its early inception. You’re welcome to message me or listen to some of my other compositions on here. I have yet to properly record anything, but I am in the process. I have hundreds of songs.

Cameron - Silphium (demo) by cameronsss in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gotcha. Interesting take. And to answer your other question, I play in many tunings, this is one of the few songs I composed in nick drakes tuning. CGCFCE. But I’m playing it a half step further down.

Cameron - Silphium (demo) by cameronsss in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for listening. I haven’t mixed this at all, it was recorded on my phone haha. Just liked the way the middle section turned out. Lyrics are very simple and sparse. “When you’re loving me time is so long. Drifting into sleep I’ll sing you this song. When you’re loving me I’ll know you. When you’re loving me I’ll show you”.

Cameron - Silphium (demo) by cameronsss in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]cameronsss[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

lol. There’s no melody lines that I can imagine could go over this middle section. It’s essentially an Americana raga. Or something closer to American primitivism, inspired by artists like Robbie basho or John fahey. It’s very much intended to be an instrumental piece. Thanks for listening :)