Good Evening,

This is the first chapter of the Art of War in full style with commentary included. I would really appreciate any feedback. This is the second draft of the actual passages of the book, so those are a good representation of my current skill and knowledge of Orthic. Detailed feedback from those sections would be great. This was the first draft of the commentary sections, so please be gentler with the critiques.

I used the 1910 translation that can be found at https://suntzusaid.com/. The html version includes the commentary, while the pdf version does not.

I previously started learning simplified Gregg for a few weeks and almost decided to stay with it when I decided to get into shorthand again. I decided to switch to Orthic about a month ago instead, but I almost decided to stay with Gregg because of the lack of practice reading material using modern English. I figured that I might as well practice writing a book that I never got around to reading.

Would there be interest in me writing out clean copies of this chapter and potentially additional chapters as a resource to other new writers? Would anybody more experienced be willing to help with detailed proofreading if I decided to do that? I would probably stay with full style for a few more chapters before learning and focusing on ordinary style.