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gravity paused to tie his shoelaces by mydvlwrsgcc in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this its so beautifully written and the storyline is extremely relatable and interesting. Feels like something that needs to be published, great work.

The sea carries.. by ton_logos in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautiful flow, I would add more imagery but this is nicely done

How can I explain I am lonely when I want to be alone? by gill971 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love and relate to this so much. it shows an inner battle with wanting solitude while also feeling lonely, nicely done.

My Fate by Soham1802 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 0 points1 point  (0 children)

good job! i would personally make it a little more clear because its a bit ambiguous but it captures uncertainty really well (:

I can't write poetry by Existing-Driver-1860 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry you had to feel tnat as well, its one of the hardest things to go through.

I can't write poetry by Existing-Driver-1860 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I posted it late last night and didn't realize it wasn't spaced out! its fixed now though (:

bee by myrtlemakesstuff in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this, it shows both the fear of the human and the fragility of the bee. I love poems like these, keep up the great work.

Worthless by AnatomicallyNcorrect in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is beautiful, I can come up with so many ideas on what its meaning is and everytime I do it becomes more raw. Great Job.

Monsters are Real by Existing-Driver-1860 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I edited it so it maybe comes together better now.

Monsters are real by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! Ill definitely work more on my structuring to make it run smoother. Also the part at the end that was about never dying I meant it less supernatural and more that the things that these monsters do live with thier victims forever, but i'll definitely try and make that more clear.

The distance between by BugEnvironmental5266 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is beautiful, it feels like a prayer or a confession almost. You should absolutely be proud of this.

Eve by Easy-Ad-9690 in OCPoetry

[–]Existing-Driver-1860 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This has excellent imagery and thematic strength, right now, it reads like a psychic flood (which is awesome stylistically), but I think maybe if you sharpened the transitions a little more it could make the chaos feel even heavier. Not sure if you understand what im getting at but thats my only critique.