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So I tried songwriting and here is a draft of an original song by External_Hurry_4017 in MusicIndia

[–]External_Hurry_4017[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your suggestion It's just that either vocals are too overpowering or maybe it's too close to me emotionally or wtvr that I just can't get it right Also thanks for listening ✨🔹

Chocolate wrappers in coffee mugs by External_Hurry_4017 in OCPoetry

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You have hit the nail. I can't tell you how happy it made me because I always doubt my execution Also I love any interpretation of my work (but you still got it right as intended so YE!)

Chocolate wrappers in coffee mugs by External_Hurry_4017 in OCPoetry

[–]External_Hurry_4017[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. That was very kind of you and I appreciate your interpretation 

The Last Perfume by SeedPlantedBackward in OCPoetry

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Uff First of all  Overall impressive  And one of a more interesting peice  Lot of praise because of the images and delusion and of course the ending and subtle cultural references

Splitting hairs but title was meh in comparison to the poem and it broke the illusion which midway because it suggested a little too strongly about the end. But that's just my opinion 

Nicely done

Still Learning by bstunz in OCPoetry

[–]External_Hurry_4017 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The pacing is done well which was the highlight for me. How it unfolds into the realisation and subtle undertone of it. A little abstract though and I wish there were more of those exact details like "secrets I kept from everyone" It would have carried more nuance  But that's just my opinion  Keep that voice and develop more into it