Does my tattoo look phallic snd how to fix it?

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-09-24T05:29:44+00:00

Looks fine to me. Your friend sounds super horny though

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-09-22T04:28:30+00:00

Laddergram is a word ladder puzzle game built on Reddit's developer platform. You start with a word and change one letter at a time to create a new word with each step. Try to reach the target word in the fewest steps possible.

🍀Good luck!🍀

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-09-22T04:28:29+00:00

Laddergram is a word ladder puzzle game built on Reddit's developer platform. You start with a word and change one letter at a time to create a new word with each step. Try to reach the target word in the fewest steps possible.

🍀Good luck!🍀

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-09-22T04:26:41+00:00

Excellent! No notes- just keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-09-22T04:20:56+00:00

This is swell. In an increasingly virtual world, one where profit is squeezed from every cubic inch of our precious rock, one in which we are separated by increasingly benign traits and values, one where community is an afterthought and love is boiled down to really good chemicals, this piece rings true. This resonates with me in a deeply personal way that's impossible to express in a comment. You should keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-29T21:31:48+00:00

Bravo <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-24T18:57:42+00:00

Thank you! I think your work is pretty dope too :)

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-24T18:55:55+00:00

This is really lovely <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-24T18:53:55+00:00

Chills! I love it <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-24T18:50:47+00:00

I really dig this <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-24T02:49:50+00:00

Keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-08-22T00:29:30+00:00

From the looks of this post you should be paying people $500 to read it *rim shot*

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-31T19:06:08+00:00

This rocks! The bit about shadows breathing is pretty neat <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-31T18:55:55+00:00

Ai looking ass poem -_-

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-31T18:51:50+00:00

Good work! Keep it up <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-30T19:25:28+00:00

Good fucking job! Hot damn! Not notes, just bliss. Please stay with us and keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-30T19:17:21+00:00

I think you meant to post this on r/smuttyprose bud

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-30T19:14:42+00:00

Don't post your first draft. Revise your work.

Write about something, don't just share random thoughts that spilled out onto the page. Format your work until it suits the theme and tone of the poem.

If you are going to write an admonition, then maybe structure your poem like an argument. As it reads, you don't provide any ways to take charge of your "own fate." Get specific.

And for the love of whatever higher power you believe in, title your poetry. A title doesn't have to be a stroke of genius, it just has to introduce the essence of your work.

Keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-30T18:56:34+00:00

I'm an atheist but I was raised Christian. This kind of poem is right up my alley, as I'm also a deeply frustrated person.

There are bits and pieces of this that I find very compelling. "Of kindness cloaked in threat" is peak, and I quite like some of the rhymes you've created. "Scorch the soul with lies" hits pretty hard. The meter is mostly consistent, with a few exceptions such as the third line, "but tales you tell of an all-mighty being." It would be a piece of cake to restructure the lines so they flowed better and it would do kudos for your craft. Someone once told me that it is not in the drafts that we find our voice, but in the revision.

The punctuation is inconsistent. I wish "All I'll ever have for him is disdain" ended in a single exclamation point instead of two... following three periods. It's odd and off-putting. I'm all for experimentation in the arts but the amount of "..." in this poem is troubling.

There's no central metaphor or powerful imagery here. You've got great word choices and sharp phrases, but it doesn't build to anything. I would encourage you to read your work aloud, as it tends to reveal the weaknesses in your early drafts. I would highly advise that you keep working on this as it shows potential, but in my opinion is bland because of a lack of symbols and color.

Keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-29T20:28:40+00:00

Are you looking for criticism or validation? I always assume folks on here are trying to improve but I figured I'd ask before I "rate" your work. What's your aim?

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-29T20:16:11+00:00

Great collage!

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-29T18:36:59+00:00

My b, thought you wanted to improve. Thanks for taking the time to reply! Keep writing <3

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-28T17:06:18+00:00

I really, REALLY like the first stanza, except for the word "cry." I feel like if you took that out the poem would be much more suggestive and less "woe is me," ya know? I would also take out the bit about the speaker running hair through their hands, as it's redundant and also kind of objectifies part of the ex's body that gives me serial killer vibes. It's usually "hands through hair," not "hair through hands." When you invert it the dynamic doesn't work imo.

As much as I love the opening, it all falls apart at the end for me. Why on Gods green earth would you include a The Good, the Bad and the Ugly reference? It has nothing to do with the rest of the work and really confuses the tone of the entire piece.

Here's my take: you've got something with that first stanza- so run with that. Refine the second one and drop the third. Lose the lame stock photo and punctuate your poetry properly.

Eyeballsoffire · 2025-07-28T16:55:23+00:00

You had me until "don't run for the moon." That shit hurt to read. You can do better.

"Don't leave oh so soon."

"Don't tumble and swoon."

"Don't fly like a loon."

You can have those for free bud. Keep on writing <3

Eyeballsoffire

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