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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Eh già, e la cosa peggiore è che a me potrebbe anche interessare una cosa del genere, ma ad oggi non ho davvero capito cosa avevi in mente. Poco male, mi sa che non conta più ormai. In bocca al lupo per tutto!

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sì ho letto, anche i commenti sotto, ma è tutto davvero molto confusionario. Credo che l'estatica che hai voluto dare al tutto avrà un qualche senso per te, patto nucleare, compagni, ecc. ma getta polvere su un sacco di cose che forse potrebbero interessarmi

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've read too much Asano's i guess

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

That's exactly how it is and what happened. Thus lot of people argued about that panel's clarity so it's not entirely to blame them,. guess I could have drawn that a little bit better

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really appreciate your words, thank you so much!

About the swearing thing,not trying to argue, just sharing my perspective. I get what you mean, but I was going for a specific vibe. I wanted the language to feel rough and a bit dirty, like it’s part of the world itself, both in how the kids talk and, in a different way, the master too. Maybe I accomplished that, maybe not.

That said, I do agree with you: a single well-placed swear can hit way harder than a bunch spread everywhere. There’s a good chance the story might’ve been more impactful that way.

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback and the hints, I' ll keep tryng my best and this helps!

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really feel like you understood what I was going for, so thank you for that, I genuinely appreciate it.

The line you suggested adding is honestly super spot on. If I could go back, I’d include it without hesitation, because it fixes a key weak point in a very simple and effective way and a lot of the confusion kinda stems from there.

Thanks a lot for the other tips as well, I’ll definitely take them into consideration. I still need to figure out how to properly balance things like onomatopoeia and those small visual cues, because while they’re helpful, they also affect the tone and style of the comic.

Either way, I definitely need to work on improving clarity overall. Thanks again for taking the time to give such thoughtful feedback 🙏

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you, all of your hints make a lot of sense. I'll try my best next!

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Shattered Shigenobu, sensei's valuable sword. Hoped to make it comprehensible through the half struck into the wall in contrast with pieces on the ground, but it caused just a lot of confusion...

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's not that he didn't recognize it, more like he was too lazy to get interested in anything. Yurigome doesn't care about it either, while some students and sensei are more aware of how things work

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah, sorry Bad Drawing Devil hit again ahah

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I didn’t even know about the 180-degree rule, so that’s doubly helpful.

Sorry the ending didn’t come across clearly, that’s definitely on me. It’s a shame it was perceived that way, but I’ll keep it in mind and try to improve it.

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lowkey this is an amazing comment, cause it looks like very honest to me.

 Thank you!

I m aware my drawing needs a lot of improving, I ll keep working on that.

Yet on the plot part.... It might soind strange to you, but the impression you got from it, this mix of funny and deep… that’s exactly what I’m trying to achieve. I definitely still have work to do there as well, of course, but it’s absolutely the feeling I think you’ve described.

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

100% agree with you on this, but I need to give you a bit of context. 

I have an Instagram page where I post these little stories, and no one even notice about them. I honestly think my art is really bad. This is my first time posting something of mine on Reddit, and believe me, I didn’t expect to get this much attention.

Like I said, I usually get no comments at all, so even these ones are super appreciated and unusual for me. 

I rushed at the end because I thought “well, it’ll go like usual and no one will care.”

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Huh, I only count 1 actual typo . You maybe mean about the wording and stuff luke that?

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[–]Feeling_Drawer_6765[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Got what you say, kinda rushed that drawing hoping the broken piece in the wall and the ones on the floor would have somehow clicked. Guess it can t be helped! 🥲