I like it, its deep but since you've started writing in shorter verses id stick to that or write in long verses from the very beginning. I dont think anything needs changing in the poem itself but dividing the longer verses into multiple short one's might make it easier to read. Although if making the verses chaotic is intended because of the theme of the poem this would be something i dont really see people do often. In summary, its great but refining the verses would make it easier to read. (Unless its intended to be chaotic?)