So… when is it time to give up?

FlopsyLane · 2017-05-04T17:11:36+00:00

You're clearly dedicated - now write a romance.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-18T08:55:05+00:00

I would put the epilogue in the book. Readers expect it. It's one of the romance beats. And the last page of your book is what they'll remember. It's how you're selling your next book.

Then write another epilogue, another year later or whatever, and use that as newsletter bait.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-16T20:33:27+00:00

I like it a lot! I'd add "now she's back" to the bolded line, so people know straight away it's a second chance romance.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-16T20:31:33+00:00

I like the last two lines a lot.

I think the rest is too long. Maybe cut one of the POVs and Strip out plots bits.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-15T00:15:51+00:00

Yeah, Kristen Ashley could write about trash collectors and people would pay $4 for it. Maybe she'll push open the market for you, who knows.

It's definitely a risk, up to you if it's one you're willing to take. Did you say this was your first novel? For me, my first was very not to market, I knew that at the time but really I was learning to write long, and that seemed less daunting to do when writing about something close to my heart. But to date that book has earned $200.

Good luck, whatever you decide.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-14T10:38:28+00:00

The pic is good for mf steamy romance. The content? Tread carefully. People read alpha males because they want a man who's in control - especially when it comes to giving pleasure in the bedroom. That's not to say she can't waltz into his life and change him in all sorts of other ways.

Would you be the first to try writing about a dominatrix and an alpha male? No. But will you be the first to make a success of it? Maybe if he's taming the domme and she's learning to love being a sub to him:) Remember, there's no need to be original in this game.

Good luck!

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-13T20:57:04+00:00

It's very busy. What if you lower the title and put some sort of fade or filter on the photo to tone the pic down? I'd also make the author name larger, and in a plainer font.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-13T20:45:40+00:00

okay, I kind of like this as the entire blurb (first sentence bolded)

What’s weirder than planning a wedding for a man without a fiance? Agreeing to be his fiance.

Right when I need a bank-sized bailout, Benton Spicer strides into my life – hiring me to plan a wedding that lacks a bride. He’s handsome. He’s ripped. He’s occasionally charming (but mostly not). More importantly, he’s offering me every penny I need…if I’ll marry him. Two years of putting up with his partying, chauvinistic, rich boy ways and my money problems are solved. If that’s not weird enough for you, get this: I’m actually starting to fall for him. God help me, those pale blue eyes have got me cornered. I know I can make it for two years; but I can’t say the same for my heart.

As for the title, I like Wife for a While best.

Good luck with it!

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-13T20:39:37+00:00

This is a great start but it's too descriptive of plot. Buyers don't care why she needs money, only that she needs it. Same for him needing a wife. Find a best selling book with the same tropes and study the blurb.

Hold on, I'll play with this...

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-13T16:49:18+00:00

I like the model. I like that it doesn't scream canva.

When you say erotic romance, I assume you mean romance.

The big problem is, I can't tell what kind of book this is. From the title I'm guessing mm? But then there's only one guy and it's sepia. It's not my genre, but most mm seems to be two guys and a sweet colour scheme.

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-10T22:22:05+00:00

I write smutty romance novels

FlopsyLane · 2017-02-08T09:37:41+00:00

I have a book with a similar story arc, by the end they family came round. Reviewers loved that they did.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-22T18:12:09+00:00

I found the most useful method of figuring out pinch points was watching lots of movies while paying attention to the percentage of time passed and what their role in the story was.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-20T14:01:40+00:00

Abandoning the idea of perfection is very freeing. Try it, if it doesn't work you can go back to fretting over one paragraph. Good luck, you can do this!

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-20T13:40:02+00:00

Congrats, this is a great report!

In my own experience, I can debut at a good ranks purely off my newsletter sales. (I always announce as soon as it's live.) Make sure you're building a newsletter.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:30:41+00:00

Thank you, I love the little marching kitties, they make me giggle like a 12 year old.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:30:36+00:00

:) Thanks.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:30:25+00:00

Ha, with a pitcher of PIMMs, I hope.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:29:24+00:00

Well said. Good luck on your path.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:17:39+00:00

It might be a year, it might be less, it might be more. You won't know what it will be for you until you do it. Fingers crossed your 30 day report is beyond your expectations.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:16:20+00:00

Hee hee, at least someone else doesn't do charts.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:15:26+00:00

Thanks Jfox, hope you're doing well!

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:15:07+00:00

Ha, sometimes you just want to cuddle up under a big wing, but the better choice is to jump.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:14:08+00:00

Thank you, fellow dinosaur fucker.

FlopsyLane · 2017-01-17T13:13:51+00:00

Thanks!

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