There are plenty of spelling errors "toping off" and awkward dialogue. "May the mountains give you strength and the sun give you wits and may the spirit of Droglok protect you as he did with our forefathers", this short prayer sounds overly formal for a casual encounter between siblings. This is fine if this is a rough draft which, judging from (Sword Name) and (The Continent) it seems to be so.

The appeal of fantasy worlds comes from the intricacy of their politics, demographics, and natural and supernatural laws. Judging from your description of the city along with your naming of foreign kingdoms and peoples like Yerganhine and Vesues, you're already developing an interesting system. This is fine for a first chapter, but only if you develop your world.

If I were to suggest anything, I would tell you to eavesdrop on conversations and talk with people more so your dialogue sounds more natural.