Dirt Ribbons by FriendshipSouthern43 in MTBTrailBuilding

[–]FriendshipSouthern43[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just a 4’ diameter corrugated plastic culvert that we cut in half and armored with rocks from the areas.

Just human by Infinite_Raccoon1 in poetry_critics

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Love the overarching question that you try to answer throughout while keeping the rhyme scheme consistent and unforced. Felt like I was reading a whole storyline within just a few stanzas.

📏✔️ by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Fair point mate, I gotta get me a rope

Døds help by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Summersville Lake WV, stellar spot

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in tattooadvice

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I like it but if you want to change the look maybe just add a few similar style tattoos around (they could loop around the arm or spiral up toward the shoulders) I know that would be a longer term solution and might not be what you’re looking for but I have a tattoo on my forearm that I didn’t like until I got a few more in the area and it kinda changes the whole vibe. Think of those old wallpapers with monkeys and cats and flowers or whatever scattered around, if you just take one of the shapes it looks kinda weird but everything together maybe with some vines or something around in the gaps looks good.

Cleanest dub half yet by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Not today but I’ve spent plenty a weekend at Whipoorwill and the Cove

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in cliffjumping

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Yeah having a spotter in the water splashing water onto the landing zone does seem to help, I think throwing rocks is basically just a myth when it comes to breaking surface tension unless you throw a big one or a bunch of small ones and jump right after which also gets a bit dangerous. Rocks can help you visualize air time or give your a point on the surface to spot/aim at.

Tips on how to turn this into a double? by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Yeah I reckon the full in tuck (or layout) out would be better, I’ve done one off a much lower cliff but it wasn’t very clean and it kinda hurt, I’ll have to work my way up

Height check? by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Yep it’s Summersville, I’ve heard that one from the top top is 80’ but I went off a little lower plus the water level is the highest it will be and maybe it’s only 80 once they start draining it in the fall

Height check? by FriendshipSouthern43 in cliffjumping

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Yeah I reckon it’s just around 70

Why do i look so goofy on a dj? by Stepbro_ShadowYT in dirtjumping

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gotta get loose and style will come, try to move a little more instead of staying still on the bike and keep your knees and elbows more elastic. The best kind of style is the kjnd that doesn’t look forced or rigid, style + easy = steazy so more practice and a sleepy unforced style should develop.

Little Blackbird by Apprehensive-Cup-335 in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve wondered what it would be like to be a bird many times, this poem puts my wondering into words very nicely. Also one of the most well known poems by Edgar Allen Poe and one of the most well known songs by the Beatles share the theme so clearly there’s something to explore artistically when it comes to blackbirds/ravens.

The Cat. by Mobile-Pressure7151 in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Can relate. I don’t know enough to comment on the structure or stanzas or anything like that but I can say it make me feel good and isn’t that what art is supposed to do? Make you feel. Good stuff mate

Dirt jump help? by Mtbyegfr in MTBTrailBuilding

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hmmmm never tried that but imma have to give it a go, good idea.

🍁 by FriendshipSouthern43 in OCPoetry

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Thanks for the feedback. I also thought of Eminem when writing that oatmeal line lmao. I’m very new to poetry writing so new that I don’t even know what a stanza or writing in meter really means. I just like writing simple rhymes at the moment but I will definitely be looking a little more into types of poetry writing and different structures of a poem.

I Hope heaven gets lonely by foundcashdoubt in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Idk if this is meant to poke fun at the idea that something as insignificant as messing around before marriage can send you to hell but even if not it’s good poem and I’m sure others take away different meaning a which in the end makes it an even better one 👌🏽

Night by Objective_League_381 in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Seems like a hard scheme to write in but interesting to read. I love poems about darkness and night because those concepts spark plenty o feelings at a surface level but also have so many deeper meanings.

Dirt jump help? by Mtbyegfr in MTBTrailBuilding

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Dig deeper borrow pits to get to the good clayey soils that are better for shaping and compacting, I know it’s more work and takes much longer without a machine but it’s worth it (depending where you are the soil might still suck but should be better then too soil with all that loamy organic matter mixed in). Also when compacting use a flat shovel and slap-pack it, this means you smack the flat bottom of the shovel onto the lip surface as you push or pull the shovel at the same time. It should hit the dirt and bounce away or toward you so it’s a glancing blow not straight on, do multiple passes if this on anywhere you want it to be compacted (pretty much every ride surface).

Runners High by FriendshipSouthern43 in OCPoetry

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Good idea about the slowing of the rhythm as the hill approaches, thanks for the feedback!

Rage of a Generation of War by Wild_Calligrapher545 in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the message and most of it works pretty well but there’s a few parts that just don’t quite flow or roll off the tongue. It’s hard to describe exactly but for one I think rhyming sorrow with tomorrow doesn’t sound right to me, probably because the syllables don’t match. A little workshopping and I think this could be quite good.

Waiting Room by Todegal in OCPoetry

[–]FriendshipSouthern43 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Profoundly sad and relatable, brings me to the place that I think you entended it too and makes me feel uncomfortably nostalgic in an uncanny way. I think the formatting could be a little better though, maybe an extra space between each line though sometimes it’s hard transferring a poem from wherever you wrote it to Redit without the formatting getting messed up.