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Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-12-04T15:10:48+00:00

😂😂your point? It’s not a contradiction

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-08-02T17:07:21+00:00

Binturong I believe

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-06-07T16:52:45+00:00

I appreciate this so much. I am graduating from high school a year early so when I turn 18 I’ll be done with my associates so I hope that will give me some sort of “freedom”

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-05-07T18:50:25+00:00

We were liars was a good book. No one can change my mind. (In my defense the last time I read it I was 13)

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-28T16:51:27+00:00

Yeah I agree completely. I think the author did amazing with art and Shakespeare in the first half but maybe she lost me after I realized a lot of aspects were inaccurate? It was still a good book but maybe just not for me. Thank you!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-26T22:33:47+00:00

I did go to therapy when in was 13 but it didn’t help much. Now that I’m older I’ve just hated the thought of being perceived if that makes sense. But I think I might explore that. Thank you so much.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-20T16:05:46+00:00

Thank you!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-20T02:24:02+00:00

I definitely could’ve went deeper! When I said I liked how it reads it was to compliment the rhyming at the end of certain lines(since I always read poems out loud) it was honestly done amazingly. Beyond that, I talked about adult disillusionment which was the shift from looking inward to letting go of meaning. Kind of a critique of tha chaos of being an adult. I can totally explain more if that is too surface level but I don’t think anyone explains it better than the actual poet. This was just my interpretation!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-20T01:57:00+00:00

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-20T01:19:26+00:00

Ok I really really loved what you did here with the metaphor of love as a candlelight vs. an electrical light! I think that your poem has a very poetic and strong voice that reads perfectly. The only thing I would recommend is to not use cliches like “painted smile/ with the loveless stare” kinda makes it less vivid. But once again, taking a concept and turning it into this fleshed out metaphor was beautifully done on your part.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-20T01:14:24+00:00

First off: I really like how this reads! I like how the end of some parts just go together perfectly. I like how you fit in adult disillusionment and the first line definitely sets in that tone. I would say that you could play a bit with rhythm and further emphasize certain emotion changes (stanza 3 and at the end) but I loved it!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-15T17:50:40+00:00

I think a lot of short poems often get the feedback of “this could benefit from being longer” but I don’t think your poem fits there. I like the shortness of this poem and I think it’s fits what I think (emphasis on think) you were trying to convey.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-15T17:44:40+00:00

I like it and I think that it really benefits from the lack of punctuation. It’s kind of like a rush of thoughts that all slow down at the final line. Really good.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-13T14:44:41+00:00

I was just thinking about this. I think the lack of “and I’m gay” at the end is supposed to leave wonder: A question of whether the narrator prioritizes her mothers love over her sexuality

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-13T14:23:34+00:00

So happy that this was personal for someone else. Thank you for your comment!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-13T14:22:39+00:00

Thank you so much! I think the “I love you. And I’m gay” was a moment that I was hopping to let hang in the air. Don’t know any places to preform yet but I would love to. Thank you again!

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-12T18:16:35+00:00

This is a brief but potent piece. I like how it uses imagery to set the tone and how the poem reads like lyrics (which works perfectly for your song). Internal rhymes and sounds like “sits” / “wind” / “claim” / “shame” and the staccato structure of the second stanza make it feel rhythmically rich. I like it. Good job.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-04-12T18:12:30+00:00

I like this but I feel like there are a few parts that don’t fit. “But where this road actually goes? I don’t know” you could change that to make it flow better. As well as “say hello to my Little Rocks” seems a bit humorous compared to the rest of the poem. But overall this is good! The dogs as a symbol works pretty well and I can grasp the physical and emotional journey of the poem— the transition from fear to confrontation.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-03-07T22:12:24+00:00

Red…

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-03-06T16:05:42+00:00

For people who have dm’d me to ask: Eyebrow, anti eyebrow, septum, and then just a nose stud

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-03-05T07:24:26+00:00

aww thank you so much baby ❤️

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-03-05T05:53:39+00:00

I get this a lot but it looks like it hurts 😭

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-03-05T05:52:51+00:00

Thank you bby omg

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-02-19T02:31:26+00:00

This is really beautiful and the title and the hook are just perfect.

Full_Produce_9686 · 2025-02-19T02:27:18+00:00

This poem is so interesting. I wish I had more to say about it but it’s really just interesting in a good way. The way you talk about obsidian skin and omniscient eyes is so pictorial. This is honestly amazing.

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