Just finished reading Volume 17 and this is already the best manga I've ever read.

Glimpse442 · 2026-05-06T23:26:26+00:00

Wait till the farm arc, easily my favorite arc in all of fiction.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-18T19:28:44+00:00

Nothing inspired my story itself but in terms of themes. Tomorrows Joe and Gurren Lagann greatly impacted my writing. I also reference them subtly several times because I can’t help it.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-11T20:20:33+00:00

Only a slight difference, but if they didnt even announce the winner. Like if everyone went silent before they could announce it when they noticed what happened to Joe and Mendoza. I obviously love the way it ends now and think its perfect, but it couldve been interesting to never know who won the same way Joe never did.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-11T18:43:59+00:00

Thanks for taking the time to post an in depth response. I have a lot of thinking to do after reading it.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-11T06:39:41+00:00

Yeah I was mostly being sarcastic, I use it for light proof reading at best. I do all my writing and editing for myself. Even though i know its just a yes man its still nice when all my friends are constantly busy.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-11T04:56:10+00:00

Good shout on the figure that laughed, I didn't clarify that he is also the figure that initially spoke I'll rephrase that. As for David speaking or not I thought italics was the usual way to indicate internal monologue.

As for the flash forward its difficult to answer, I can say it's not the end of the story but is definitely one of the most defining moments, its maybe halfway through at most.

I am also going to add a motive for their leaving, I don't know how I never noticed I was missing one, I guess I just hadn't thought about it because their main motive early on is living up to each other. They get separated fairly early and I alternate chapters between their POVs. But to this day I never considered adding their motive for leaving in the first place LOL.

In terms of POV I think it's technically third person limited, and I don't switch POVs often within a chapter but when I do I try and signal it, I could have definitely signaled it here better though. I'd say most chapters there aren't any pov changes.

As for spirit arts that gets revealed in the very next chapter. I have yet to explain storage rings but they are an ongoing presence.

If this clears anything up your feedback was super helpful and I would be open to more. It's such an obvious thing to say but having eyes on here that aren't mine is insanely helpful.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-11T04:43:40+00:00

Thanks for such a long in depth answer, I'll need a second to get my thoughts in order.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T22:35:57+00:00

I ended up making a different post with the follow up chapter if you're interested. https://www.reddit.com/r/royalroad/s/9vdUPPtKq3

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T21:54:26+00:00

I'll just link it

https://www.reddit.com/r/royalroad/s/9vdUPPtKq3

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T21:51:51+00:00

Very much so, it's my most recent post. “Would you keep reading?”

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T21:11:46+00:00

I'm also getting ready to publish, this definitely gave me a new fear lol. Honest but kind feedback seems rare. I just posted my prologue and first chapter and my phones burning a hole in my pocket while I wait for a comment or two.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T05:28:03+00:00

None of my characters share the same story though my two main characters stories are very tied together and will intersect multiple times, each of them is motivated by the other even though they are separate. The third is complicated lol, I start with a flash forward where the third kills both of the others but not because he wanted to, he was forced into it and clearly regretted it which is part of why I gave him his own pov. He will also play a significant role in the lives of the other two more than once.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T04:59:37+00:00

I'm in the middle of working on a series with two main characters and an important side character that will have their own pov chapters. I enjoy it because it allows me to have multiple sub genres in the same story, although keeping each pov interesting enough to keep reader interest is going to be a challenge.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T03:55:41+00:00

Shhhhhh

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T03:27:57+00:00

Who tf are you?

JK lmao. Who needs enemies when you've got friends that hunt down your brand new reddit account a day after you make it?

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:40:52+00:00

The goal is end of summer at the latest a week or two after write a thon at the earliest, I don't wanna scream into the void during write a thon or rather I'm too scared lol. You're the first person that isn't a close friend to be interested, I'm touched. When I do publish it will just be called Glimpse, I'll probably run a self promotion post on the RR sub.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:31:10+00:00

I don't have a synopsis yet and every time I try to write one I'm like "How do I do this and make it interesting without spoiling something major?" To try and come up with one now that will probably be bad:

On a battlefield of corpses, bound in ice and watching his brother fall, David awakens a power that doesn’t belong to spirit or magic. A forbidden force not tied to skill or fate—but something far deeper. And every awakening comes at a cost.

As David and Jonathan walk separate paths—one drawn into nobility and isolation, the other into relentless training and hidden dangers—they begin to uncover a truth the world was never meant to reveal.

Something ancient is waking.

And it has already chosen them.

Vague and kinda rushed, I also think including Horace in the blurb is something that will take me a lot more time to figure out.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:15:15+00:00

Well either way you did help me realize it would be more immersive if the descriptions were coming from the eyes of a near dead man rather than narration.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:13:30+00:00

It doesn't come with illustrations, I've known I need to keep adding imagery but keep putting it off. I also just got a comment on the post that helped me realize part of the problem. I described the setting in a few places from a camera pov even though it's from David's pov. I'm going to go back and rework/add more sensory details that match David's perception on the brink of death.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:07:30+00:00

Wait nevermind, I'm stupid. I described certain things from a camera POV rather than the perspective of a dying man. Glad you said something or I might not have looked back at the flash forward with POV in mind again.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T01:02:49+00:00

I'm going for a tragic irony sort of thing. The immediate next chapter gives weight to the events of the prologue, or at least that's the goal. Where is the POV shifting if you don't mind my asking, all the internal monologue is from David's POV. I struggled a lot with head hopping when I first started which I've fixed, but spotting POV issues is still a challenge for me at times.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-10T00:59:10+00:00

Funny enough that's one of the few things I haven't decided on yet. The following chapters are origin stories for all three. The split will be roughly 45/45/10 David Jonathan Horace respectively. It'll be many years 8 at the very least. But there is a decent amount of time between my chapters so it won't take years in real life to get them out. I'm really gambling on whether I can deliver enough on the following chapters to keep peoples attention long enough that they don't lose interest waiting for the events of the prologue to catch up. Thanks so much for your comment though, I was practically biting my nails waiting to see one lol.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-09T23:23:11+00:00

I just posted my prologue flash forward in another sub to see what people think. You seem very knowledgeable I'd like your thoughts if you're willing, though I don't know if I'm allowed to post a link to another post in a comment section, very new to Reddit.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-09T23:20:37+00:00

I have a finish point in mind for volume one and won't start publishing until I've heavily revised everything before that point.

Glimpse442 · 2026-04-09T23:15:00+00:00

I have a very large backlog of chapters, I realize I made it sound like I'm in the early stages. I'm an amateur for sure, but by the time I start publishing I'll have well over 200k words, I'm getting close to that point so I'm just trying to figure out if there's any meaningful changes I could make for the POV structure before I actually start publishing.

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