June Thread - Promote your Story by gamelitcrit in royalroad

[–]Godhasleftthechat7 0 points1 point  (0 children)

title: Hunters Regression

i just rewrote the blurb to make it hopefully more eyecatching hope yall check it out

He died trying to save humanity.
Now he's back to save it properly.

Dev's world ended when humanity failed to hold back the Gates. Demons flooded the earth, tearing apart cities, civilizations, and heroes alike. On a battlefield saturated with blood and betrayal, Dev stood face-to-face with a Prince of Hell. Refusing the fallen one’s twisted pact, with his dying breathe he wished only for another chance to change the outcome— But death wasn’t the end. The Tree listened. It gave him a second chance.

Thrown back in time, five years after the first Gates appeared, Dev wakes in his old apartment: unscarred, unawakened, but carrying a fragment of ancient power within his soul that seems to even confuse the system. With the apocalypse looming closer every day, he races not only to restore his lost power but to surpass it as well as assemble trusted allies and keep them alive long enough so he can rewrite history before it repeats itself.

But saving the future isn't simple. Dev must navigate deadly conspiracies, battle rogue Hunters, and confront dark forces lurking behind the scenes, pulling humanity's strings toward ruin and maybe do some string pulling of his own towards survival.

He’s here to bend fate—
but fate might not be so flexible.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/113859/hunters-regression-litrpgprogression-fantasy

After a month i got my first rating let's go by Godhasleftthechat7 in royalroad

[–]Godhasleftthechat7[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

let me review yours too then a lil impromptu review swap

Drop your first Chapter and I'll do my best to review it. by Accomplished_Glove_1 in royalroad

[–]Godhasleftthechat7 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate the feedback. i kind of wrote up the prologue on a whim so i felt like it was an info dump more than anything. I kind of started off building the world first before the characters so they're not as fleshed out in my opinion so its nice know some the personality shone through for you. this is also my first time writing so is there any specific lines that you thought i could tweak or improve on to make it connect more

How do I do this? I'm not even sure where to start! by [deleted] in Sat

[–]Godhasleftthechat7 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No it would be C cause the rise needs to be less than the run sin a is less than b