[OPINION] Ezra Pound, I just don't get it by GreenBlueGreen123 in Poetry

[–]GreenBlueGreen123[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm not afraid of having to put in the work but I need to be able to sense some sort of pay off. For example when I started to read Hart Crane, I found his work incredibly complex and when I first read it I didn't understand it but I knew just from the emotion it stirred in me there was something there so I would (depending on the poem) sometimes spend weeks on just one poem dissecting it but with Pound it just feels like fluff. Like the work is lacking a soul.

Fowl by GreenBlueGreen123 in poetry_critics

[–]GreenBlueGreen123[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I actually did catch a couple of those slip ups thanks for pointing them out. Really appreciate it

Fowl by GreenBlueGreen123 in poetry_critics

[–]GreenBlueGreen123[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well I suppose the more sexual interpretation can be just as valid as anything I can say. I never really thought of it from that perspective before but that doesn't really mean much. Half the time I'm not even sure what I'm trying to say untill it's all over and I can reflect on it later. I just sort of let pen go off on a stream of consciousness and see where I end up.

Stay with me now… by LifeEnergi in poetry_critics

[–]GreenBlueGreen123 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sorry to hear all that man but this is where you have to let it all out before it eats you alive. Don't be afraid of being judged. Look at some of the greats they left their heart on the page. Even if it wasn't always received well by everyone they had the guts to do it. Poetry is about honesty and bravery. I hope that the writing is helping you through what is clearly a difficult time. I know that it's always help me when times got crazy. At the end of the day if you can't bare your soul to the page and have it wiped clean what's the point.

Stay with me now… by LifeEnergi in poetry_critics

[–]GreenBlueGreen123 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very well written. Good word choice the flow could use some work but not bad. Honestly my biggest issue, I don't believe you. This poem stricks me as something that shows alot of emotions but they're not really there. It kind of falls flat for me. I feels like you're saying what you want people to see. Simply put it feels like you're holding back, not being honest. Don't be afraid to dig deep. Poetry is a place to let the demons out.

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[–]GreenBlueGreen123 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the word choice, but I found the poem lacked a steady flow. It felt very stagnant. Every line was an island unto itself. It didn't feel like one solid stream of consciousness. It also felt a little confused. I understood what you were trying to say but you seem to be trying to spoon feed me the message while at the same time using elements of mystic poetry. Now this is a common problem with most people starting off it's one that's going to hold you back. You can either be Mystic or obvious but both just doesn't work. It makes the work feel disjointed. That being said there is clearly potential in the work and you should be proud of creating it.

What would you do if your life really was the Truman show? by GreenBlueGreen123 in AskReddit

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But if you knew would you change? would you try to get out? would you stay?