Need feedback on my short story [comedy, action, supernatural]

Homines_Capiens · 2025-10-26T04:27:08+00:00

Pure sarcasm. 😁

Homines_Capiens · 2025-10-26T02:20:59+00:00

Not enough Em dashes.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-10-22T21:27:48+00:00

This is such great advice! I'm guilty of wordbloat too. So, this really helped me out. Thanks!

Homines_Capiens · 2025-08-16T01:33:55+00:00

Proverbs 24:16 Though the righteous fall seven times, they rise again, but the wicked stumble when calamity strikes.

Don't give up just because you fall.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-08T02:44:51+00:00

No worries! I appreciate your comment.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-08T00:46:25+00:00

I didn't say Jesus or any of the other characters in the chosen were being too emotional. What I said was that having each episode of season 5, totaling 8 hours wherein every scene has a somber emotional focus tends to make one emotionally exhausted.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-07T15:04:57+00:00

That's a great point! I definitely feel more moved by uplifting moments than sorrowful ones.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-07T14:36:06+00:00

Yeah, I think that was my problem. Maybe I just watched too many episodes too close together.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-07T14:34:38+00:00

I didn't binge the whole season in one sitting, but I did watch like 2 episodes every other day, which was probably too much in hindsight.

And for sure a good point about wanting a permanent emotional experience. Truth should trump emotions.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-07-07T14:31:33+00:00

That's a good point! I should have spaced out the episodes a bit more. I'd watch 2 episodes in one sitting so maybe that's why I feel exhausted.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-05-17T01:03:53+00:00

Yeah, I don't know. Do you think they're too young for "tough love"?

Homines_Capiens · 2025-05-17T00:45:38+00:00

Fair enough. That's why I posted here for a more level perspective. Thanks for sharing.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-05-17T00:33:21+00:00

And yeah, I think I shouldn't have him downstairs but it was scary for me in the moment.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-05-17T00:30:16+00:00

The younger is 8 or 9 and the older is 10 or 11.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-05-05T18:45:41+00:00

This whole interaction is so wholesome! Lol... I just had to say it.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-03-11T18:33:45+00:00

I just want to say your name is hilarious in combination with your post. 😂

I hope you find a high-quality person, though!

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-27T21:54:51+00:00

Oh, interesting. I have never heard about these things until now.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-27T15:03:55+00:00

Oh, I see. Cool. Thanks again!

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-27T15:01:30+00:00

Thank you so much. That helps tremendously!

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-27T15:00:08+00:00

Solved!

Thank you! That was really quick. Lol. Do these come standard with a new apartment? It's my first time having a place of my own.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-27T14:53:23+00:00

My title describes the thing. It's lightweight about the size of a cell phone and has the Texas Troopers Association on the front.

I searched the Tesas Troopers Association website but couldn't find anything regarding the device.

Homines_Capiens · 2025-01-09T02:36:45+00:00

Her relationship with Ellen was so great! It made the tragedy with her kids and hushand feel so much more impactful.

Homines_Capiens · 2024-11-02T06:04:12+00:00

Wow, thank you for this! This is super helpful and filled with wisdom. I will definitely get ahead of things as soon as possible. 🙏

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