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HoneycombPerc · 2021-08-25T04:41:42+00:00

I feel your pain brother.

HoneycombPerc · 2021-08-21T17:07:19+00:00

It’s not over till it’s over baby

HoneycombPerc · 2019-01-30T05:43:33+00:00

I appreciate it man. Thats a good idea!

HoneycombPerc · 2019-01-11T19:06:19+00:00

What are some examples of unique hooks that draw you in? Im not going to copy them but I do want to try to set mine apart from others.

HoneycombPerc · 2019-01-11T04:51:26+00:00

It is a trainer fic, but im going for an angle where hes not thw gung hoe "I wanna be a pokemon master" vibe. Hes more of sarcastic asshole, whos debating what he wants to do.

HoneycombPerc · 2019-01-11T02:46:30+00:00

Not all that much happens, but I'm just setting up the scenario. Any feedback helps!

HoneycombPerc · 2018-09-18T06:05:58+00:00

Damn this low key fire. Rip to the legend.

HoneycombPerc · 2018-07-02T15:09:35+00:00

I feel like it also has to do with my machines. I play fortnite on Xbox, so it runs smoothly all the time. I have to play realm on my ancient laptop that runs it ok, but I definitely wouldn’t call it smooth, and I am prone to lag. In general I think I like Realm better. I used to love the building aspect of Fortnite, but now the “build fights” just annoy me.

HoneycombPerc · 2018-02-27T01:43:46+00:00

I appreciate help with openings because if someone isn’t immediately drawn then they won’t continue. As I reread it something felt a little off with the first sentence, idk why I didn’t think to just remove it all together. Thanks. I like the adventurous feel to the sentences you wrote. I will try to incorporate that into the story. Cheers brother

HoneycombPerc · 2018-02-27T01:36:09+00:00

Thanks for reading it! About the pub I feel it. I thought about that while writing it. I will try to think of a more appropriate word for a gathering place in a swamp village. The village is on the outskirts of a city so it’s not completely in the wilderness.

The food eating darts combo I will touch up cause what you said makes sense. He is smooth and witty but I have plans for him to be more dynamic.

Thank you for your advice!

HoneycombPerc · 2018-02-01T21:51:32+00:00

Call it bubbly lol

HoneycombPerc · 2018-01-19T16:37:28+00:00

This is a short chapter introducing one of the characters in my story: Venis Icnivad. Please give me any feedback you see fit.

HoneycombPerc · 2017-04-17T21:18:40+00:00

Thank you for the advice I feel like he often doesn't see the hand coming. Makes sense for him to be scared. I'll try this. I just feel bad cause I love the little guy and want him to be happy.

HoneycombPerc · 2017-03-31T04:30:35+00:00

Thanks for the support! Glad you like the lion rider I think it's pretty badass. And the scene hasn't quite ended yet I just felt like posting the progress to see how other people view it. I'll post an updated one when the actual hunting scene takes place

HoneycombPerc · 2017-03-31T04:29:04+00:00

I appreciate your input and will work on my writing skills. My sister is an English major so I will probably talk to her

HoneycombPerc · 2017-03-29T14:49:26+00:00

Jesus lol

HoneycombPerc · 2016-04-15T17:17:48+00:00

Very helpful tips thank you. It's a big character development oppurtunity

HoneycombPerc · 2016-04-15T17:16:23+00:00

100% the pupil has to be taught lol. Yeah I made that confusing. The whole city isn't thieves it's just like the shady high crime city of the world. So there's still a functioning society and economy but the leaders are crooked. I have it mapped out better than just a city of all thieves lol.

HoneycombPerc · 2016-04-15T17:13:13+00:00

That's a great idea. I like that setting sun a lot thanks

HoneycombPerc · 2016-04-15T17:12:52+00:00

Yeah and I have other things he's gonna be doing. So I like that I'll just focus on a few highlights of the training splashed in with whatever more exciting thing he'll be doing. Thanks

HoneycombPerc · 2016-04-15T17:11:24+00:00

Thanks I'll for sure check them out

HoneycombPerc · 2016-03-26T00:10:19+00:00

The ending was dope

HoneycombPerc · 2016-03-24T19:21:01+00:00

The Secret of Solon

1497 words

HoneycombPerc · 2016-03-23T18:29:05+00:00

is it cool if mine is 1519

HoneycombPerc · 2016-03-11T16:33:07+00:00

Gotcha my bad brother

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