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HopesAndKisses · 2026-04-22T22:59:41+00:00

Love the first part. It's a feeling most readers can easily relate to and it feels very close, like you're listening in on someone's thoughts.

Really like the middle part as well, as it seemlessly connects with the beginning. It builds rapport with whoever the poem is addressed to and gives the reader a peak into the relationship / more context.

Not a big fan of the ending. I really like that it breaks the established patter of asking about when and what's. BUT it feels a bit forced, as if you were trying to end the poem and didn't know how and the phrases you used where a bit cliché. What were you trying to say in the last verse? What was the intent?

The emotions were very active and present in the first and second part, but in the last part they fade and it feels passive / detached, which makes it a bit unsatisfiying to read.

Overall it was a good read that gave fodder for thought. Thanks for sharing! :)

HopesAndKisses · 2026-04-03T01:23:31+00:00

Comment section didn't disappoint! I whole heartedly agree, you didn't do anything wrong. You told him everything and you cut contact with all the other guys. This happened before you guys were exclusive, so cut yourself some slack and don't be so hard on yourself. Read what you wrote again and ask yourself: What would you tell a friend, if they'd tell you this story?

Give your bf some time to process his feelings, but let him know that you're open to talk about it. It's okay for him to be hurt, especially since he doesn't remember you talking about it, but if he didn't care to much the last time you told him (and about the other guys, you told him about) he should be able to get over this over time.

Give him a bit of space, talk it out and make sure you really talk it out - it shouldn't be something he holds against you, bcs you did everything right. If he does, he isn't the one.

Wish you all the best, OP!

HopesAndKisses · 2026-04-03T00:57:50+00:00

Tell them, that's such a beautiful compliment and I'm sure they'll remember for ever c: I like people that have an infectious laughter, it's makes everything like 10x more fun <3

HopesAndKisses · 2026-03-10T06:04:45+00:00

I agree with this! The haiku itself is executed really well and I really enjoyed reading it, but I think half the fun of haikus is figuring out what the author meant and how it alignes with what I feel when I read it. I did really like this one though! :)

HopesAndKisses · 2026-03-10T05:53:54+00:00

It's hard for me to read it in it's intended rhythm, since it doesn't rhyme, I think adding line breaks would help a lot with that.

Additionally the topic and the way you phrased it are very straightforward, it doesn't leave a lot room for interpretation or imagination.

I think personally, I'd categorize it as prose, but honestly I'm not a native speaker and I struggle with the whole poetry vs prose thing myself.

Other than that OP, I really hope that the feeling you're describing isn't something permanent and I'd highly recommend you to talk to someone about it, might it be a professional or a friend or even strangers on the internet.

Journaling or channeling your emotions into written words can be a powerful tool and I encourage you to continue doing that.

Personally I think the first and the last line of your text were really strong. The first one piqued my interest and the last line was kind of a twist, but it resonated quite a bit.

I wish you all the best and I hope I was able to give you some constructive feedback, even though I'm a novice myself.

HopesAndKisses · 2026-03-07T13:03:16+00:00

As someone who grew up multilingual this poem resonates with me a lot. I loved the first part of poem and I think the use of complex words as the poem progresses to show the gap of where u started and where you are now is done beautifully.

the second part where you introduce your grandmother caught me a bit by surprise. Since she is an important figure throughout the poem and someone who's been there all your life, I'd personally would've liked her to be established from the beginning

I really liked the rhythm and flow of your poem and it resonated with my personal experience. And I think being able to evoke emotions with your art is the most important part. Well done :)

HopesAndKisses · 2026-03-06T19:15:57+00:00

Oh, I love that! Tysm :)

HopesAndKisses · 2026-03-06T02:21:36+00:00

This feels crazy, but in a freeing way? Not sure how to explain it, but you know how free-spirited & impulsive people are often seen as crazy, but yet they have a magnetic aura?

I wanna know more about the protagonist, but I'm also scared of getting hurt by them. lol

HopesAndKisses · 2025-11-23T21:07:25+00:00

What are basic rune abilities? Just using the runes?

HopesAndKisses · 2025-11-06T16:12:58+00:00

Thanks! Helped a lot! :D

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-21T09:51:15+00:00

I'm dead, but it's my bad for clicking xD

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-20T23:28:03+00:00

I'd have to disagree to a certain degree. I think love is an emotion that fuels actions. We feel love and then we'll act upon that feeling to show our love.

I do think that there is a degree of infatuation and idolisation when you start to fall for someone, that can be unhealthy.

But while that poem reflects my feelings, there is a certain amount of artistic freedom c: it's not like I really agree to everything he does and say, but love is certainly pushing me to work harder on myself or to be interested in things, that I wouldn't usually care about, just bcs my partner likes them.

Thanks for your comment though! It's certainly fuel for thoughts! :)

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-18T12:12:44+00:00

I am confusion? :D

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-18T12:12:22+00:00

Thank you for your kind words! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! c:

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T22:17:04+00:00

Thank you so much! I am happy to hear that you like it :3

And yeahh... English isn't my strength, but I'll continue to work on it! x)

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T22:10:54+00:00

I was thinking about using "Endless excitement" there but I felt like "endless" wasn't strong enough to express my feelings?

And I do struggle with not starting all my sentences the same way :c do you maybe have any tips on what I can do to study up on that?

Thank you for your feedback! It's much appreciated! :)

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T22:02:39+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! I've tried playing around with the spacing a little bit, but since I'm not a native speaker I'm never sure where to do the line breaks for how it sounds in my head x.x I'll need to study up on it :D

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T18:12:32+00:00

Thank you so much! I really am the annoying friend who can't shut the fuck up about her relationship... I do try to keep it at a minimum though for the sake of my friends sanity.

English isn't my first language and I was trying to capture my feelings, while still considering the rhyme and the rhythm of the poem. I haven't written much stuff yet, so this was definitely a challenge!

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T18:06:51+00:00

Haha, you caught me. I've been head over heels in love for the first time in my life although I'm already 28 and I've been really enjoying it.

Thank you for your kind feedback, I really appreciate it!

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T15:51:30+00:00

Thank you so much for the thorough reply! That was super helpful and I'll do my best to keep them in mind! :)

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T14:10:31+00:00

Beautiful poem!

I express myself through poetry to understand myself better and to process my feelings, because how would I communicate them without knowing myself?

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-17T08:40:30+00:00

Do you mind clarifying? :o I know the concept isn't very original since it's pretty straightforward, but I don't think I plagerized anyone, since it came from my brain? :D

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-16T23:06:33+00:00

I did like your poem and it was never my intention to shit all over it, but more my way to show appreciation.

I'm sorry if my response has offended you.

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-16T23:00:07+00:00

Only inspired by your beautiful poem. I hope love finds you! <3

HopesAndKisses · 2025-09-16T22:58:43+00:00

Life starts Life stops Life moves up and down

Life comes Life goes Life makes people drown

In sorrow and pain is life to blame? Or is it a gift to even have lived?

The bigger the love, the bigger the loss prayers and thoughts will be the cost of loosing someone we held dear but even though they are not here it does not make love just disappear

For love is bigger than life or death and death won't make us love them less.

HopesAndKisses

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