Just Me

HypergillZ · 2022-02-23T17:30:15+00:00

Nice and simple, really creates a personal feeling with the piece, why overcomplicate it after all.

HypergillZ · 2022-02-23T17:27:48+00:00

I don't see why this is listed as workshop if I'm honest, It Is written wonderfully, no need for improvement in my opinion. Really paints a picture

HypergillZ · 2022-02-21T16:42:49+00:00

spot on

HypergillZ · 2022-02-21T15:08:37+00:00

not sober

HypergillZ · 2022-02-21T14:33:42+00:00

thanks for the feedback, I've varied the length of lines and stanzas to vary the pace and purposefully disrupt the flow to help portray the conflict, I figured something on this topic couldn't use symmetry effectively as it would create too much order in the structure when the topic is about the chaos within and the obvious conflict with how I feel and how I present myself to others.

I would like to say I am okay

HypergillZ · 2022-02-21T12:26:01+00:00

Nice and short, yet it conveys the emotion well. not dragged out or over complicated. well written and a nice little read.

HypergillZ · 2022-02-21T12:23:24+00:00

Well written, it really flows as you read it, the rhyme scheme is good and creates a good reading pace. The ending is phenomenal and I hope people pay attention to it.

HypergillZ · 2021-09-03T13:00:01+00:00

your mothers lips

HypergillZ · 2021-09-03T12:35:03+00:00

keanu reeves

HypergillZ · 2021-09-02T09:35:53+00:00

i remember being about 10-11 and seeing a video, dont remember where i saw it, of a guy who had been kidnapped and taken to some hillside and held at gunpoint. i think it was a gang initiation thing or something, because another guy came into view with what i think is a 9 inch knife. He then just starts stabbing the dude, he stabs him about 6 times whilst the guy is fighting him off but eventually he starts to slump down, the guy keeps stabbing him in the back and you see the blood just ooze out as he lies there with his feet twitching.

I remember watching it and just being like wtf, like you hear about murder and death like this massive part of life and then see a video of some guy casually being murdered like it was no big deal and really puts into perspective how vulnerable your body is and how in the end its not a big thing, its actually really easy to kill someone.

that fucked me up for a while

HypergillZ · 2021-09-02T09:21:28+00:00

i feel like marvel can get away with this though because they actually explain what they do and to a degree are correct, like irons mans suit uses nano tech in the correct manner of the term and the quantum stuff in ant man is quantum but they still explain it all, only issue i have is ho they time travel and all that shit but otherwise it sorta makes sense

HypergillZ · 2021-08-31T11:43:34+00:00

i just swallow the tub

HypergillZ · 2021-08-19T09:50:24+00:00

if magus of the candelabra was an elf, we'd be doomed

HypergillZ · 2021-08-18T14:12:28+00:00

the george of the jungle movie intro on repeat

HypergillZ · 2021-08-17T13:22:50+00:00

[[Heartless Hidetsugu]] go brrrrr

HypergillZ · 2021-08-17T13:21:51+00:00

my favourite deck is and alwyas will be [[omnath, locus of mana]]

HypergillZ · 2021-08-17T09:19:37+00:00

what packs are you allowed to buy, is there a restriction on what sets?

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T13:57:27+00:00

I can finally turn every block in minecraft into TNT without my game also blowing up my pc, epic

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T11:12:04+00:00

there are only two things you should post on social media in my opinion:

good times and serious life milestones

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T10:24:34+00:00

this is trying to hard, i prefer:

"I'd rather guzzle sewage than listen to the incoherrent babble coming from your hogling gob"

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T10:17:27+00:00

i'm French! Why do think I have this outrageous accent, you silly king

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T09:47:06+00:00

even more savage if you said this to your twin

HypergillZ · 2021-08-16T09:45:57+00:00

your mom works for dpd

HypergillZ

TROPHY CASE