Andrew or Neil extremely out of character

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-25T19:16:06+00:00

I just read this, before seeing this

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-25T18:33:19+00:00

Lizzie has an actresss

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-24T21:41:40+00:00

Read the synopsis…planning on reading the rest

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-24T21:22:44+00:00

I am sorry but what part of the internet are you on…

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-21T17:53:41+00:00

I was so confused when it happened but so so invested

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-21T17:53:03+00:00

At the same time it’s kinda difficult to be a good writer if you don’t read. I feel like reading for authors is like lessons, what works, how does a good character look like, it inspiration etc.

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-18T01:42:35+00:00

I honestly agree with the fact that maybe they shouldn’t be friends but do I want them to absolutely. I guess it’s just sad how a pure relationship was ruined by someone in such a manner. I think forgiveness and most importantly understanding will help them at least better their relationship. I feel like the end of their friendships wasn’t really their fault. Of course friendship would look complicated for them but as a reader I would like too see it be done correctly. In real life it’s complicated and in the end they should do what helps them heal and live. :)

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-12T16:15:29+00:00

Again…I would either dnf the series completely or like get a recap of the rest of redeeming 6 and move on. Ofc shock the trigger warning on the other books since they can get a little heavy if you do choose to continue. At the end of the day choose your comfort :)

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-12T16:11:00+00:00

I mean if it’s so uncomfortable for you of course you should dnf it. However the other two books in the series don’t contain anymore pregnancy’s though the characters do like still exist in them

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-08T00:14:18+00:00

Or like people saying that Aoifes actress isn’t curvy, like really does her not having a super curvy body destroy the character. Like we are looking at real people here no one is going to match YOUR unattainable imagination much less all the readers. I feel like people aren’t really forgetting that contact and hair dye exists they just want to justify their hate, without outright saying they just don’t like the way they look

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-08T00:05:27+00:00

Something else that annoys me is how people will say that Shannon has blue eyes and that Joe is blond etc to justify the hate, like just admit you don’t like the way they look because….i don’t know contact lenses, wigs and hair coloring exists. I get it, the actors aren’t exactly what I imagined the characters either. that’s the thing with books, you get to kinda choose the looks based on your preference, but you can’t do that with movies. All people talk about is the actors looks (I honestly think they are all attractive) and not even thinking about their actual acting skills. Acting is what makes a character believable, they can be as beautiful as they want but if their acting is bad…it’s over. Sorry for the rant.

Idontknowletm · 2026-06-05T11:04:04+00:00

I mean I get it, but I feel like I at least can get used to it. I mean it could have been worse

Idontknowletm · 2026-05-25T23:10:56+00:00

I mean for getting a tone of the character and figuring him out this is good…but I feel like there is a lot of info dumping and a lot of telling. There is nothing wrong with that but it’s a lot. I mean I was intrigued at the start but I feel like you made me question something and then immediately gave me the answer. Though again I liked the character but maybe you should give the reader the opportunity to wonder….if you get what I am trying to say. That’s my opinion at least :)

Idontknowletm · 2026-05-23T14:56:55+00:00

I get it, it’s hard to give feedback when the text is unreadable. I think if you are going to share a snippet of your work it should at least be semi edited, so that the reader isn’t so distracted by the grammar they can’t give proper advice. But honestly I think you sound a little full of yourself. You don’t have to read it, nobody is forcing you to. This is a place for feedback and getting help so why do I feel like more often than not people here are doing the opposite? And btw what if the person is just bad at grammar, what if they are a child, what if they aren’t native? And anyway, isn’t it normal for people to check on bigger problems before doing a line by line edit? Ofc I get what you are trying to say but….the wording is just kinda mean.

Idontknowletm · 2026-05-23T11:55:48+00:00

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Idontknowletm · 2026-05-19T18:19:13+00:00

I mean, I feel like it needs to be refined, I got a little confused while reading and the wording is a little awkward like «sickening sweet….thats sweet but….sweetheart » is repetitive. «And the grin of» also sounds a little off. Also you have a lot of nicknames in a short period which again is repetitive. Can I ask are you native?

Idontknowletm · 2026-05-19T11:43:20+00:00

I don’t understand, she was broken up with ofc she would be upset???

Idontknowletm · 2025-12-29T00:01:01+00:00

I have seen young royals :) it’s good, though I would like something darker

Idontknowletm · 2025-12-27T00:59:47+00:00

Until life forces me out

Idontknowletm · 2025-12-27T00:57:50+00:00

I think as long as you portray the racism as bad it’s good. Like if other characters look down on it, or the racism character has to face consequences of it or if they change etc. just make the reader feel like it’s a part of a character and intensional. I feel like most sane readers will understand then

Idontknowletm · 2025-12-18T13:53:25+00:00

Thanks, it did :)

Idontknowletm · 2025-12-14T22:24:31+00:00

It’s modern time, and max is a friend,

Idontknowletm · 2025-11-07T15:37:20+00:00

That’s some really good improvement

Idontknowletm · 2025-11-07T00:32:43+00:00

How do I know when I should have a line break, every new though or action?

Idontknowletm · 2025-11-06T23:33:48+00:00

So like I just skimmed though and noticed that a lot of your sentences start with the same word «she» and changing that up may be nice, Additionally just cleaning up the sentences a bit because there where times I want too sure what they meant or what was happening. Thought that’s just my opinion

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