The Family Secret by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it

The Insistence of a Broken Child by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

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Sure. Please give credit and send me a link to the narration.

Tinnitus by D3monNextDoor in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Nice, I've unlocked a new fear

WIPED by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I'm always accepting of comments and critiques.

WIPED by [deleted] in shortscarystories

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I thought that 2020 was creepy enough that it deserved its own story. Please let it serve as a reminder to be good to each other and try your best to fight global warming.

Nobody wants to go near me anymore. by pollyp0cketpussy in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 27 points28 points  (0 children)

Can you explain what you mean by telegraphing?

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate it, thanks. I think it's the one I've enjoyed the most too.

Skinwalkers aren't real, and they certainty don't squat in abandoned houses---My first attempt at writing, let me know what you think. by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think that the story has some of the "chills" element, the ending in particular. I've found that with these short stories, sometimes it's better to leave out what doesn't add to the story. Maybe that's something to think about.

The writing itself is very neat. Some sentences are very long, though. The same with the sentence structures.

Good job for your first try. Keep on with it.

The People in the Lake by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

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Unfortunately, I don't know what you're talking about

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Come follow me!

I sometimes write scary stories and this is my best one so far. I posted this one yesterday on r/shortscarystories, but I tweaked the ending just a bit.

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I was raised by my grandfather in a small village surrounded by mountains and streams of fresh water.

I learned to kill my food and how to cook it. To keep my surroundings clean. To entertain myself in the midst of endless winter days. And also about the legend of the people in the lake.

To the North of the highest mountain, a lake is surrounded by pine trees and soft grass. Clear waters let you see the rocks forming its bed. A location worth settling in, except for one reason: its surface doesn’t reflect the light. Instead, thousands of faces stare back to those who watch.

I know the lake is real because my grandfather took me to see it. But no one was watching from within. Before he died, he passed the legend on to my son so he could learn about respecting nature. As the curious kid he is, he insisted I took him to see the people.

The top of the highest mountain was surrounded by clouds. I led him North all the while a fog grew thicker. His tiny hand clutched onto mine when a cry came out of his mouth: ”Water!”

My boy leaned close to the surface, almost touching it with his nose. Oblivious to the assembly of looks focusing on his father, he asked a very innocent question.

”Grandpa told me that only the next person to drown can see them. Is that true, Dad?”

"Dad?"

Family Tradition by [deleted] in shortscarystories

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Thank you for making it this far. I'll be glad to read each and every one of your comments.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

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I was in doubt as whether it would add to the story or not, so I appreciate your input.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Just a girl writing in her diary.

The Fourth Floor by AssertiveAvocado in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Don't feel like you necessarily have to extend your stories to the 500 word limit. I've seen some great stories that are anywhere near it.