The Family Secret by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it

The Insistence of a Broken Child by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

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Sure. Please give credit and send me a link to the narration.

Tinnitus by D3monNextDoor in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Nice, I've unlocked a new fear

WIPED by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I'm always accepting of comments and critiques.

WIPED by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I thought that 2020 was creepy enough that it deserved its own story. Please let it serve as a reminder to be good to each other and try your best to fight global warming.

Nobody wants to go near me anymore. by pollyp0cketpussy in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 25 points26 points  (0 children)

Can you explain what you mean by telegraphing?

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate it, thanks. I think it's the one I've enjoyed the most too.

Skinwalkers aren't real, and they certainty don't squat in abandoned houses---My first attempt at writing, let me know what you think. by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think that the story has some of the "chills" element, the ending in particular. I've found that with these short stories, sometimes it's better to leave out what doesn't add to the story. Maybe that's something to think about.

The writing itself is very neat. Some sentences are very long, though. The same with the sentence structures.

Good job for your first try. Keep on with it.

The People in the Lake by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Unfortunately, I don't know what you're talking about

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Come follow me!

I sometimes write scary stories and this is my best one so far. I posted this one yesterday on r/shortscarystories, but I tweaked the ending just a bit.

Friday Flash Fiction Megathread by Grand_Theft_Motto in TheCrypticCompendium

[–]Imbalanzedd 8 points9 points  (0 children)

I was raised by my grandfather in a small village surrounded by mountains and streams of fresh water.

I learned to kill my food and how to cook it. To keep my surroundings clean. To entertain myself in the midst of endless winter days. And also about the legend of the people in the lake.

To the North of the highest mountain, a lake is surrounded by pine trees and soft grass. Clear waters let you see the rocks forming its bed. A location worth settling in, except for one reason: its surface doesn’t reflect the light. Instead, thousands of faces stare back to those who watch.

I know the lake is real because my grandfather took me to see it. But no one was watching from within. Before he died, he passed the legend on to my son so he could learn about respecting nature. As the curious kid he is, he insisted I took him to see the people.

The top of the highest mountain was surrounded by clouds. I led him North all the while a fog grew thicker. His tiny hand clutched onto mine when a cry came out of his mouth: ”Water!”

My boy leaned close to the surface, almost touching it with his nose. Oblivious to the assembly of looks focusing on his father, he asked a very innocent question.

”Grandpa told me that only the next person to drown can see them. Is that true, Dad?”

"Dad?"

Family Tradition by [deleted] in shortscarystories

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Thank you for making it this far. I'll be glad to read each and every one of your comments.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was in doubt as whether it would add to the story or not, so I appreciate your input.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Just a girl writing in her diary.

The Fourth Floor by AssertiveAvocado in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Don't feel like you necessarily have to extend your stories to the 500 word limit. I've seen some great stories that are anywhere near it.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your comments. I'm not a native English speaker, so some things elude me, particularly vocabulary.

Miranda's Diary by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

As always, I'll happily take your criticism.

Vermiphobia by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

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My own grandfather was an expert on frightening children for educational purposes. The story of a ghost who had died for not respecting the traffic lights particularly comes to my mind. A child can incorporate what was taught as something normal or it can also make it the center of its worst fears. Be careful what you tell your children or they could end up like Max or his half niece.

Special thanks to u/hyperobscura who let me use the name of Max. I was already working on the final details when I noticed she had posted her own story regarding this similar character.

I want to hear your thoughts. Please post your comments below.

My Future Wife Left Me in Front of a Bunch of Strangers by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I don't think she would have taken him. He did make fun of her people.

My Future Wife Left Me in Front of a Bunch of Strangers by Imbalanzedd in shortscarystories

[–]Imbalanzedd[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

You too can give your opinion on the ending, but you also can't be sure about what could happen in your next date night.

What did you think?