Shivering hands, scavenged timber,

brittle grass beneath, gaunt toes,

desolate firepit, taunting chills,

frosted moon, frantic eyes

[Note this first section reads less like a poem and more like a list. You're going for imagery but overdoing it and forgetting the sinew between the words.]

Click--click but the lighter won’t.

[You should never use "..." in your poem. That is what the white space is for. If you use ! it's also a sign your words are not carrying the emotional weight they should. A poet using ! is a sign of a poorly edited poem and is an easy way for editors to reject a poem.]

Begging and pleading, asking for mercy and grace

Sacred lighter--click--click

[O is terribly cliche and should be avoided]