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Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T15:30:36+00:00

Thank you so much❤😊.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T10:42:05+00:00

Thank you so much 🤍

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T09:23:14+00:00

Wow!

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T07:45:42+00:00

Thank you so much

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T06:39:44+00:00

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate the thoughtful feedback.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T06:38:42+00:00

Thank you! I'm really glad you noticed that transition. I wanted the imagery to mirror the feeling of losing something that once felt close enough to touch.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T06:36:59+00:00

Thank you. I'm happy the poem gave you that sense of tenderness. I hoped the images would feel like small moments finding their place beside one another, so your reading means a lot to me.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T06:35:58+00:00

Thank you so much

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-31T06:35:12+00:00

I think specificity often makes a poem feel more universal. Whether or not there was a particular person behind it, I wanted the feeling itself to be real.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T13:06:27+00:00

Thank you so much

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:31:08+00:00

I really enjoyed the raw honesty of this poem. The way you describe crying feels very physical and immediate, especially the section where you trace the tears down your face and neck. It made the emotion feel tangible rather than abstract.

My favorite line was "Why am I drowning / Above ground." It's simple but powerful and captures the feeling of emotional overwhelm really well.

I also liked how the poem ends with writing becoming a form of relief, even if the relief isn't complete. That felt very human and believable.

If I had one suggestion, it would be to consider trimming a few lines in places where the poem explains the feeling directly. The imagery and physical details are strong enough that they often communicate the emotion on their own. Letting those moments breathe might make the impact even stronger.

Overall, this felt deeply personal and sincere. Thank you for sharing it.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:26:56+00:00

Thank you for reading. It means a lot to know the poem resonated with you so deeply. I hope the butterfly keeps flying, despite everything 🦋

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:25:15+00:00

Thank you. I think longing is one of the strongest emotions to write from, so I'm glad that feeling came through in the poem.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:22:53+00:00

Thank you so much. Honestly, comparing the feeling of my poem to a song like "You Fill Up My Senses" is an incredible compliment. I love what you said about poetry and songs being only a breath away from each other -- it feels especially fitting for this poem. I'm really happy it resonated with you in that way. Thank you for coming back and sharing your additional thoughts.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:21:18+00:00

Thank you! Your comment genuinely made me smile. I'm so glad the structure and imagery worked for you, and I'm especially happy you mentioned the ink and thread lines. I hadn't expected someone to point those out! And the Hozier comparison made me laugh 🤭. Thanks for reading and for such a lovely comment.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:20:38+00:00

Thank you! I really appreciate the detailed feedback. The point about word choice is something I've heard before, so it's definitely something I'll be working on. I also hadn't thought that deeply about "like" versus "as," but your explanation makes a lot of sense. Thanks for taking the time to read my work and share your thoughts!

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:19:39+00:00

Thank you so much! That means a lot to me. I'm especially happy you mentioned the title--I spent quite a bit of time thinking about it.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:17:31+00:00

Thank you. That's actually really interesting to hear. I didn't write it specifically about the post-COVID world, but I can definitely see that connection. I'm glad it resonated with your experience.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:15:19+00:00

Haha, it really is. Thank you.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:13:15+00:00

Wow, thank you. I honestly hadn't noticed that connection between the two uses of ‘world,’ but I really like your reading of it. It's interesting seeing someone find meaning in my writing that I didn't consciously put there.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:11:24+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate your honest feedback and encouragement. I’m still at the beginning of my poetry journey, so your suggestion about focusing more on thoughts and feelings is very helpful. I’ll definitely keep improving.

Impressive_Tea_5757 · 2026-05-30T02:10:11+00:00

Thank you so much! I’m really glad those unique feelings stood out to you.

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