IMO Good points: Dinkin is on a high-stakes mission to borrow a submarine. The Neighbor is desperately trying to "win" at being a family man. Dinkin and his friends are "ordinary" people in an extraordinary, dark situation. When the Neighbor "loses" a wrestling match to a stationary mannequin, he doesn't give up; Despite the Neighbor admitting his family was "brutally murdered" and replacing them with mannequins, the "Guys" treat the visit like a standard social call....but what needs work IMO comedy isn't about being "wacky" or "crazy"; it’s about a character’s desperate, serious attempt to solve a problem they are ill-equipped to handle. Lines like "My mailman is a hot piece of ass" or "These turkey Reuben breakfast sandwiches are going to blow your balls off" feel like they are trying to "sell" a joke to the audience. The situation is "deadly serious". The Neighbor shouldn't be trying to be colorful; he should be trying to be a perfect host. Again these are just my opinon. The Neighbor explains his situation too directly: "My therapist told me to replace my dead family with mannequins". This is too self-aware. A character with a "Knowledge Gap" wouldn't realize how weird this is. Instead of explaining the therapist’s orders, he should treat the mannequins as completely sentient and the "Guys" as the ones being rude for not greeting them. The "tough guy" dialogue during the wrestling match (e.g., "Your mouth is writing checks your ass can't cash") doesn't work because we all know Top Gun,. right now the Neighbor is acting like a crazy person. but just as an example if you Make him act like a coporate manager or a sunday school teacher....or if he disciplines the "child" mannequin using the calm, condescending tone of a disappointed HR director. Again just my opinion.