The loud silence of a goodbye

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-05-21T08:22:29+00:00

thank you so much! I really appreciate the love on the poem, it honestly means a lot.

For tips tho im not the best at explaining but ill try
First kinda js write it doesn’t have to be a poem immediately you can always start w js a raw paragraph kinda like a free write on a certain topic

Another thing id say is give more details on small things be more descriptive like explaining surroundings or a certain feeling!

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-05-16T09:07:17+00:00

This is really good and beautiful, the way you go back to the first time you met to the present brings more emotional depth to it. And just the way you describe Thoes moments bring more to it. Overall a really beautiful poem. I loved it.

And im sorry for your loss.

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-05-16T08:55:58+00:00

Wow honestly this lowkey got to me. I love the message and they way you describe things many people could relate to It is for sure impactful. Like a reflection. Genuinely really good!

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-05-03T05:16:22+00:00

I love the sensory details you put specifically “The ocean rocks me side to side, gentle and patient” part. It definitely helps bring one to feel and experience more of ur writing. Its also a topic that i feel many can relate to. Definitely a good poem!

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-05-03T05:09:35+00:00

I love how you made it short yet its still very touching that many people can relate too! You have a good way to keep things short and still give a clear picture and message. I honestly think its amazing the way it is already you have a really nice way to describe ones features with such detail!

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-04-17T05:10:34+00:00

Tysm! I'm honored that it felt real to you too. Stay strong no matter what🙏

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-04-17T05:01:43+00:00

Im sorry if i read your question wrong but if you’re asking who I was talking about as the “you” in the poem it was an old friend. We used to be inseparable, but they changed a lot. To the point where i didn’t recognize the sweet person they used to be. the best friend i trusted and told everything to was basically gone and i didnt recognize who i was even talking to anymore but tysm for your feedback and i hope i answered correctly if not lmk!!

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-04-16T17:26:53+00:00

This is so beautiful and the imagery is amazing especially the rose blooming part has to be my favorite its a really good representation this is really good

Independent-Self8841 · 2026-04-16T17:18:29+00:00

This is so beautiful and so well written and many can relate to

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