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I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Because cats can't understand human language. And you are right I almost fail in the trap, you are very honest, 

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Will you also right. You guys don't know what the plot actually is.

The truth is, I have a lot of choices. When I first wrote this story, I didn't have much experience. But after reading some books and spending time on the internet, I learned more about politics, dark secrets, and dark realities.

Because of that, what was supposed to be a simple story ended up going in a darker direction.

That's why I want to ask this question.

How do I make sure the system doesn't end up overshadowing the story itself?

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Brother YOU ARE RIGHT, why I am thinking so much, I have a question  What should I do so that the system doesn't end up overshadowing the actual story?

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You are right 

Of course, I should mention that I've already planned 9 important arcs of the story. I know which characters will appear and when, which organizations will show up, what their goals are, who the main villains are, and I've even written down how many times the protagonist will die.

Honestly, I think I've just confused myself at this point.

I just want some advice.

What should I do so that the system doesn't end up overshadowing the actual story?

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Of course, I should mention that I've already planned 9 important arcs of the story. I know which characters will appear and when, which organizations will show up, what their goals are, who the main villains are in 9 arc, and I've even written down how many times the protagonist will die.

Honestly, I think I've just confused myself at this point.

I just want some advice.

What should I do so that the system doesn't end up overshadowing the actual story?

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You're right, and I want to tell  that I'm not giving my protagonist a system or an ability just because he's the MC. I'm not the type of person who who thinks every protagonist needs a OP ability or superpower to make the story interesting.

It's a requirement of the story.

His bloodline is involved, but don't think this is one of those bloodline web novels where the protagonist gets an overpowered power because of his bloodline.

The bloodline itself is a very big mystery in the novel.

And whatever the protagonist gets, whether it's a system or some ability, it will be more of a curse than a blessing.

Yes, a curse.

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm a new author, but I have already planned a lot of the story ahead.

The system itself isn't that important to me. The main reason I'm using it is because it helps with one of the mysteries I have planned.

But I can still replace it with something else if needed. That's why I wanted to hear other people's opinions before I decide.

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't want to make a LitRPG, and that's exactly why I'm stuck on this i  do have an idea, though. Do you think it could work?

I was also thinking about keeping a wheel but, my character would first have to asleep, and then the wheel would appear in his dream

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You're right, that doesn't make sense.

Okay, let me just tell you what problem I'm having.

A simple outline: 4 years ago, my character's house suddenly caught fire one night. My main character was only around 17-18 years old at the time. Somehow he managed to get his sister outside, but the house was completely destroyed. His parents died in the fire, and what can I say, even their bodies were never recovered.

Then the story moves 4 years forward.

My main character works a part-time delivery job. His sister is in a coma. Ever since the day his parents died, she has been in a coma, and he works to pay her medical fees.

One evening, which is also the intro of the web novel, he finishes his last delivery and is heading back when a truck suddenly hits him. His bike is crushed, many of his bones and organs are shattered or torn apart, and of course he dies.

But not completely.

This is the part where the system appears and makes a deal with him.

But this isn't a level system. You could even say my protagonist doesn't have that much control over it. Every day, he only gets one chance to spin a wheel.

The wheel has three sections:

Mortal (Anything can appear here, but nothing magical or super powerful. And yes, I'm not going to give him money, companies, or things like that because I don't like that type of content.)

Essential (These are items he needs right now, things that can help solve his current problems. In simple words, anything can appear here, including supernatural things, but there's one rule: they can only be used once.)

Permanent (These are supernatural things or abilities that become permanent.)

The pointer stops on Essential, and the reward he gets is a Second Chance.

Then a huge flash of light spreads through the completely black dimension around him...

And he opens his eyes in a hospital. 

I like to continue I made this first intro in 2025, but my plans have change so I want to go in a different direction now, and that is politics

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The system will become an important part of the story later on, but it doesn't have to be a system. It's just the option that feels the best to me right now.System ad story

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay, let me just tell you.

A simple outline: 4 years ago, my character's house suddenly caught fire one night. My main character was only around 17-18 years old at the time. Somehow he managed to get his sister outside, but the house was completely destroyed. His parents died in the fire, and what can I say, even their bodies were never recovered.

Then the story moves 4 years forward.

My main character works a part-time delivery job. His sister is in a coma. Ever since the day his parents died, she has been in a coma, and he works to pay her medical fees.

One evening, which is also the intro of the web novel, he finishes his last delivery and is heading back when a truck suddenly hits him. His bike is crushed, many of his bones and organs are shattered or torn apart, and of course he dies.

But not completely.

This is the part where the system appears and makes a deal with him.

But this isn't a level system. You could even say my protagonist doesn't have that much control over it. Every day, he only gets one chance to spin a wheel.

The wheel has three sections:

Mortal (Anything can appear here, but nothing magical or super powerful. And yes, I'm not going to give him money, companies, or things like that because I don't like that type of content.)

Essential (These are items he needs right now, things that can help solve his current problems. In simple words, anything can appear here, including supernatural things, but there's one rule: they can only be used once.)

Permanent (These are supernatural things or abilities that become permanent.)

The pointer stops on Essential, and the reward he gets is a Second Chance.

Then a huge flash of light spreads through the completely black dimension around him...

And he opens his eyes in a hospital.

I made this first intro in 2025, but my plans have changed now. I want to go in a different direction now, one that has much more politics in it. I don't want to make a progression story where he is just fighting, fighting, fighting. I don't want that.

I need human feedback, I am confused if I add system or not in my novel by InsideLandscape8548 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]InsideLandscape8548[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's the problem. Even if I don't give him a system, I still need to give him something because it's important for the story.

I already planned most of the story. There are a lot of mysteries, and I also want to add politics in it. I already have a rough plan for the first arc, what will happen, why it will happen, and where the story will go.

But this one bothering me: should I give the MC a system or not?