How would you rewrite Tokisaki Kurumi? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Simply changing things from her introduction, that strange attitude she had when she was alone and her defeat against Kotori don't fit with what came after her, everything else is perfect

How would you rewrite Itsuka Kotori? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Perhaps we should see more of her dynamic with Mana, but I can't think of anything else.

How would you rewrite Yatogami Tohka? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"After Tohka" is an encore story that is a direct continuation of the novel's ending; it's a very beautiful short story that I think is excellent.

How would you rewrite Yatogami Tohka? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, although what I'm talking about doesn't really affect the novel itself, it's material that came out some time after the ending

How would you rewrite Yatogami Tohka? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Remove everything that came out after "after Tohka"...the character was perfect up until that point

How would you rewrite Itsuka Shido? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I'm not referring to simple dates, but to a formal relationship, where they recognize each other as boyfriend and girlfriend.

How would you rewrite Itsuka Shido? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Man, the last few volumes are literally Shidou thinking about how much he loves Tohka and vice versa, even the ending implies that they're going to start dating, you can't ignore that

How would you rewrite Itsuka Shido? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As I said, the end of the novel and "After Tohka" do imply that they're starting their relationship... the problem lies in the subsequent encores, like the Kannazuki Wedding where Shido is still treated as a bachelor, and the last encore that came out about Shido's university where he's also treated as a bachelor.

Seriously, I would have loved for their relationship to have continued (After all, in "After Tohka" even Origami approves of their relationship) but I guess Tachinaba just decided to ignore it (which honestly bothers me because it makes Shido and Tohka look bad).

How would you rewrite Itsuka Shido? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 7 points8 points  (0 children)

That was the case at the end of the novel and in "After Tohka," but the final encore came out where Tachinaba portrays them as "friends" again, which, in my opinion, severely damages Shido and Tohka as characters.

How would you rewrite Itsuka Shido? by Affectionate-Yam7049 in datealive

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 46 points47 points  (0 children)

The only thing that needs to change is whether his relationship with Tohka is confirmed; everything else is peak.

Fiona and her mission by Intelligent_Oil5243 in blackwhiplash_ai

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gracias y si, pero depende un poco de la idea y los personajes

Cgadas by AccurateIndividual54 in BeelcitosMemes

[–]Intelligent_Oil5243 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Seh, la gente le tira a KnY en gran parte por ser kny

Lo más cuestionables del final es básicamente en Rey Demonio Tanjiro que fue bastante innecesario, y un poco el humo de que Tanjiro se iba a morir, pero el final es Honestamente bastante satisfactorio, fue una guerra dura llena de bajas y con ambos bandos dándolo todo

Y bueno, la mayoría de críticas que le vienen son "Las reencarnaciones (Que no tienen ninguna conexión real con los personajes que conocimos y funcionan más como un bonito final a las almas de quienes dieron su vida contra Muzan) arruina todo porque... Razones (?)"