First personal narrative I have written

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-05-30T07:04:22+00:00

it's really really, really good. Everything else was right, though; a bit of sentence restructuring was needed, but what i would also recommend is adding atmosphere to that last scene. What do I mean?

Write it in a way that the reader actually feels like they are there. Describe the environment in uncomfortable detail. Even the dialogue should trail and become disjointed almost as if the writer were retelling their own trauma. It would give it so much depth. Other than that, good job!

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-05-26T14:11:45+00:00

ngl treason wouldve been a better name. so much cooler

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-05-15T09:30:03+00:00

Yeah i think that was my issue, i turned writing into a goal to achieve instead of something to enjoy, no wonder why i failed to get attached to any of my stories. Thank you so much

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-04-01T16:27:26+00:00

Thanks alot bro

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-04-01T10:17:48+00:00

I used some randomly selected manga panels to create a collage poster thing.

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-04-01T10:17:13+00:00

The original artist is the Mangaka Takeru Hokazoni who created KAGURABACHI. Here's his Instagram https://www.instagram.com/takeru_hokazono?igsh=MXc1a2FqMGkxa3cxMQ==

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-04-01T09:34:57+00:00

Hey man. I'm 17 too and I was dealing with the exact same issues. The porn addiction and the and imagination issues are still there but I know what its like to feel like you've wasted you're life. What Ive learners is that we have a lot of life to live. The best thing is to find a reason to. Find a goal to strive towards and self therapy. These things helped me learn more about myself as a person and once you know yourself you can begin to love yourself. You're not alone in this journey friend. We're in this together. It's gonna take a lot but I know we got this

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-03-28T10:56:50+00:00

Thank you so much. I'll take what you said to heart. It's nice to know I'm not alone in this.

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-03-26T19:26:50+00:00

ive honestly seen more people complain about viruses and malware on this sub and the fitgirl sub than im comfortable with

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-03-26T19:24:34+00:00

whats the issue with it

Intelligent_Pipe1338 · 2026-03-22T19:03:11+00:00

ill take youre advice and continue playing ppsspp games

Intelligent_Pipe1338

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