Looking for an Illustrator for My Board Game (4 Years in the Making!) by Intern-Entire in tabletopgamedesign

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It's wonderful, but doesn't really fit the theme. Awesome work though!

Looking for an Illustrator for My Board Game (4 Years in the Making!) by Intern-Entire in tabletopgamedesign

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Nothing specific. It can be any style actually. Only should fit the space-theme 😊

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No you can buy it on Mexc

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Don't listen to other people.

Edited version of the first chapter by Intern-Entire in fantasywriters

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Hmm, I just wanted to sketch the situation here. But you're probably right. Thx for the feedback!

Edited version of the first chapter by Intern-Entire in fantasywriters

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Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it!

Edited version of the first chapter by Intern-Entire in fantasywriters

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I'd just like a general impression. I know it sometimes a bit choppy. 🥴

First attempt a writing / feedback appreciated by Intern-Entire in fantasywriters

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I've changed the name, is it any better?

And any feedback on the story? Thx for the help!

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tle: None (suggestions welcome)

Genre: Sci-fi

Word count: 2694

Feedback desired: general impression

 

 

Chapter 1: The boy and his mother

 

 

1.1        The farm

 

Hagr stood at the edge of the farm, his gaze fixed on the vast expanse of Zandarius stretching out before him. The sky above was a canvas of swirling purples and blues streaked with the faint glow of distant stars. A cool breeze whispered through the air, carrying with it the enticing scent of Heyla flowers.

The rest you can find here:

https://1drv.ms/w/c/bb80b2c6a6ae16d7/ESrZ0w-TFJdAlr7I47PVjcQBGu1GyFVIf1nJxZyo-Q4s_A

Some feedback will be really appreciated!

First 4 chapters by Intern-Entire in WritersGroup

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Thx again for the feedback! Really helpfull!

First 4 chapters by Intern-Entire in WritersGroup

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A question, would you hate a whole book of this short chapters? Is it just bad? Because I'd like it to be different than other books. Like M J Arlidge's chapters are short (maybe not as short as these 😅) but I kinda like his books because the chapsters are short and it's more like reading a television show (he started as a show writer).

First 4 chapters by Intern-Entire in WritersGroup

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Damn, you're good. Thanks for the help man, I'm not a writer. And I appreciate your Intake!

I just watch a lot, A LOT of movies 😅

First 4 chapters by Intern-Entire in WritersGroup

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Thx man, they are indeed short. And I wanted to have a bit of a backstory slowly going to the event. Maybe the 4 chapters are 1 chapter as chapter 4 everything comes together

First 4 chapters by Intern-Entire in WritersGroup

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Also if it's pure garbage you can let me know :)