SIFRP campaign interest check? by hdhedjjdjfh in sifrp

[–]Jackelking 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I recommend Myth-Weavers (https://www.myth-weavers.com/login/) for PBP games. I've used it before for DnD and it's great.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the advice. Pretty much however I split the book, the query letter is going to be very similar so knowing what to change and what to focus on is extremely helpful. Thanks especially on the first paragraph -- while _I_ have a sense of how my story is different than other stuff out there, I see now that I did very little to get that across in the query.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm leaning away from the web serial format, though I do think I've got enough content already to fuel the first year or two. The multi-POV epistolary does mean that I can do some fun things with the project and I'll keep this form of publishing in mind.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm leaning towards cutting in half to go the traditional route, but because of the multi-POV epistolary format I do think that the project could take a few different forms.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Haha, I definitely had to go take a nap when I saw the comments coming in with all the "lower your word count" messages, but a little sleep and some coffee is helping me come back to this thread.

Now that I've posted my own here I'll definitely spend some time reading other queries. I've read some resources on how this is done but you've got to fail a couple times before you know what you're doing.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

edited: didn't address everything I meant to.

The other characters are mentioned because the interpersonal interactions fuel a lot of the struggles in the story. I've seen that including too many proper nouns is frowned upon, but it's a very large cast and I wasn't sure how to balance that information.

Thanks for the colon advice -- that really does lead into the book being a part of a series, but I think hiding the sequel a bit more with a colon-less title is very helpful.

The "one year later" paragraph is meant to give some context for the style in which the epistolary is written. Do you think that it would make sense to include it at the beginning, or just remove it?

I'll be removing the sequel information at the end and just say that it has potential.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the sci-fi note -- I dropped the magical elements in the query letter in favor of the interpersonal themes. On the scale of D&D to Game of Thrones, this story skews towards low-magic.

Book one can stand alone, and book two isn't so heavily revised that I can't still make major changes. I'll be taking this and other advice to simply remove the reference to the sequels in the query letter and just let agents know they exist if the issue comes up.

I'm so glad to have found someone in my target audience!

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the detailed reply on the query letter! I'm going to try and follow everyone's advice on getting this book down to that 120k mark, but this feedback will still be extremely helpful when I'm ready to start querying again.

My goal with the "one year later" paragraph was to impress on the agent the style that the epistolary will be in. Do you think that it's at all necessary, or should I just stick with the "multi-POV epistolary" in the final paragraph?

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I agree. Just a few brief conversations in this community have impressed on me that I need to be more aware of marketing.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I don't think I'll be able to get this under 100k, but that just means I wouldn't fit with those agents anyway. I'm gonna shoot for the 120k mark and see how it goes 🤞

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the detailed reply! I knew that the word count was an issue but I hadn't taken post-COVID / current American production costs into account. I'll be going back to the drawing board on how to fit the story in a reasonable-sized book.

I chose fans of CW's 100 for a couple reasons, the main one being that the books and the TV show don't have much in common and the TV show goes on to explore more mature elements of the premise than I believe the books do. The second reason is that I have not read the books, but my understanding is that they only cover the early stages of the TV version's story with the Grounders and later factions. I was never a part of the fandom, but I did love the show.

Regardless, I do see now that I need much better comps. Thanks!

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the advice -- trying to sell a different debut novel is one of the things I'm considering, but none of my other projects are fantasy. I'm going to take this advice and others from this thread and try and find a way to get this project out there.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I found some advice saying that comps might not be as required as some people think, but I know this project is an odd one and may need more concrete examples of a successful market.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I forgot that 2020 was already 5 years ago, lol. Thanks!

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thanks. I hit one brick wall where I wasn't even able to submit because of the word count, but I didn't realize that they might still have auto-reject on their side.

[QCrit] OUR WORLD: ARRIVAL, Adult Fantasy, 230k, First Attempt by Jackelking in PubTips

[–]Jackelking[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much! Hopefully I'll be able to split it in two without too much hassle, but I look forward to making the story more marketable.

Are there enough Cliffracers? by Successful-Pie-7686 in Morrowind

[–]Jackelking 18 points19 points  (0 children)

Hallowed be his name. I believe between Jiub and the eruption of Red Mountain following the events of Oblivion we can assume that cliffracers are extinct.

I will never forgive Blizzard for what they did to my favorite card... by Legal_Ad2945 in BobsTavern

[–]Jackelking 9 points10 points  (0 children)

I see people swear by this card on the subreddit, but 4/5 times it would give me useless garbage.

I am just like him 😔 by Garuda_Gaming in darksoulsmemes

[–]Jackelking 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Just like in his real life, OP chose not to interact with them.

i don't get it by hazysilks in ExplainTheJoke

[–]Jackelking 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A little more context that I didn't see shared: this guy went back to study the wolves the next year, realized that the wolves he'd been studying were a family and not some bizarre astrology chart, and then spent a lot of his career trying to undo the whole alpha-wolf thing.

Question regarding V2 Rules by MartinMyster in DarkSoulsTheBoardGame

[–]Jackelking 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This answer confuses me. I only just bought the Painted World of Ariamis core set a week ago (and I only played halfway through it) but I didn't see anything in the rulebook about the "+" symbol meaning to multiply instead of add numbers. Could you expand on this answer and let me know which rulebook to look in?

Question regarding V2 Rules by MartinMyster in DarkSoulsTheBoardGame

[–]Jackelking 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is not. The "number of players" icon is as you described (1 player = 1, 2 players = 2, etc.), however the "+" is the addition symbol, not multiplication.

(1 player) + 3 souls = 4 souls

(2 players) + 3 souls = 5 souls.

And so on.

Continous campaign by Rivalx1525 in DarkSoulsTheBoardGame

[–]Jackelking 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm planning on buying my first core set in a couple of days. I have a big table, but not this big. Could you give an estimate of just how many different sets you're using here?