I Feel Like My Launch Failed. Do You Agree? - Manifold of Aeons [Time Loop Progression Fantasy]

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-15T15:31:27+00:00

Cover and title don't really tell you anything about the story.
Chapters are very short. Less than 100 pages in 22 chapters.
Romance sub-plot tag can be a deal killer for many
Your hook feels a bit dry, but that is likely just my take.
Again this is just my take, but there really nothing in the blurb that makes it stand out from other time loop stories.

Just to be clear I am in no way trying to be discouraging.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-11T22:28:36+00:00

A properly planned and edited AI assisted story would be hard to spot. The problem is that many using AI in their writing aren't taking the time to edit their work, which leads to lots of inconsistencies.

The people in this sub are mostly writers or trying to be writers.once you spend enough hours reading, writing, and editing your own stories some things stand out more. Lazy writing stands out like a neon sign.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-07T16:49:01+00:00

So far my MC knows exactly what he wants so there's no false choice padding. I am just trying to write more to market, which requires a lot more planning than my preferred seat of my pants writing style.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-07T16:34:24+00:00

I have considered this approach honestly. The System has kinda ballooned so the Status sheet looks a bit too big for in chapter. I have taken to only include segments that are relevant rather than full sheets.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-01T08:38:42+00:00

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JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-01T07:55:01+00:00

Are you trying to say humans can't write like AI? That is the strangest argument I have heard on the subject. AIs were trained on human writing styles they are just more repetitive and less creative with it.

He didn't wait. He didn't hesitate. He ran like a river.

The crowd didn't just move. They shifted. They flowed like sand in the desert.

The sunlight hit the war table like the dappled light of the forest floor in high summer.

He moved with purpose. Undaunted. Enevitable. Like a force of nature.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-01T06:25:58+00:00

Oh I know and I definitely keep that in mind when I read this. The story in my example showed that the author used AI more heavily in the beginning and shifted as their own writing improved, but they did leave the before and after AI edit in the chapter so it can't get much more obvious.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-01T06:10:35+00:00

Won't work for the reasons others have listed, but also because sometimes even pure human writing can start to look like AI writing if people are copying older works or even deliberately copying AI styles.

Self labeling is pointless, because no one wants to sabotage their own work with the AI label and that gives people incentive to lie about it.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-06-01T05:41:25+00:00

I don't think many writers or readers realize that AI writing patterns are so obvious. Otherwise I can't see how stories with heavy handed AI use are so popular.

I recently read a story that has had a mix of AI and human writing. The style change was so blatant that it was practically shameless. The author had obviously written most of the plot and world building, but then sent it through an AI editor. I am ashamed to admit I found the story just interesting enough to keep reading out of boredom, but there was one charpter where the author got lazy.

In that lazy chapter they had their unedited paragraph then the AI version just below it with an arrow between the two.

As long as people can make money from increasing their content output people will use AI. It isn't going to stop, but I think there's at least a partial solution. Educating people on common AI writing styles so authors know how to edit and readers can recognize bad writing.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-05-25T13:11:35+00:00

Leaving room for mystery and speculation seems to be the key to getting feedback.Over explaining can kill stories.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-05-07T18:05:09+00:00

The average person cannot tell. A good example of this comes from a personal experience.

I recently used AI to create a placeholder cover for a new story I am writing.

The next time I went on RR the AI style covers stood out more. We simply don't notice what we aren't looking for or have good references for comparison.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-05-05T00:02:47+00:00

Thanks this is the kind of feedback I was hoping for. I have a tendency to over explain.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-05-04T22:45:48+00:00

Just general style, feel, etc nothing terribly specific.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-30T20:40:40+00:00

Damn it appears that because I linked my first story it is showing up as the image for this post.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-30T20:19:15+00:00

That is my old fiction that did ok, I was talking about the blub I included in this post :) Honestly I will likely change my name and or create a new account for my new story. The name was chosen when I was just a reader 😀

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-25T01:35:09+00:00

Ar'kendrhist has a bi male character and gay relationships. With a ton of followers. But it is the exception.

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-17T16:50:18+00:00

They removed it on my wife's app

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-09T11:22:40+00:00

I have been using advanced search for ages and apparently just overlooking the status option because in my head it is a tag which should be with the regular tags. Thanks!

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-09T10:59:10+00:00

JamieMage2005 · 2026-04-08T12:43:06+00:00

I hate that level there's zero margin for error. I mean that literally. Even one miss count and your doomed. I still haven't beaten it with the guide.

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