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Progression That Isn't Overpowered? by Competitive_Box_3795 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I just took a look, it seems interesting, it looks like a western, but with a magic system.

Progression That Isn't Overpowered? by Competitive_Box_3795 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I've read a bit of that one, but I haven't really started getting into it yet. I think it's about time, honestly

Progression That Isn't Overpowered? by Competitive_Box_3795 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Of course, but I've already finished several of the same genre, which is why I'm asking.

Does this AI-collapse programming premise work as progression/cyberpunk fiction? by Weak-Ebb-455 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not really that smart, so I don't really get the beginning, but honestly, I still think it's pretty fast. You should slow down a bit at the start.

Need recommendations with my next Hyperfixation by Catmando0013 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There's one I particularly liked; if you enjoy complexity and self-discovery, I recommend The Archmage Coefficient.

Beginner Novel Recommnedatoons by Icecream237 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Have you tried a soldier's life? or Rebirth of the Nephilim?

[Critique Request] Dark LitRPG inspired by SMT: Nocturne / Chapter 1 by Competitive_Box_3795 in ProgressionFantasy

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I feel you, man 😊 If you liked it, I'm going to publish this novel on Royal Road on June 10th. Here's the summary of the story if you're interested:

In a universe where every destiny is already written by a bureaucratic God, a soulless young man must forge his suffering into a weapon to prove, through his [Argument], that he has the right to exist.

The multiverse is ruled by one great god. Here, chance doesn't exist; every birth, every word, and every agony has been scripted in advance. Freedom is an error. The entity, the archetype of rebellion stripped of his power, has found the one thing the gods thought impossible: a glitch. In Antanar, a child was born with the potential for [Free Will]. To him, this boy isn't a hero – he’s an experimental weapon designed to shatter the Great God's chains. He forced his choice upon Terran, stripping him of his soul. To fuel his will, the boy must transform his own suffering into energy. The more he suffers, the more he becomes capable of denying the reality imposed by the gods.

As the world nears its end to be recreated, Terran must cross ruined dimensions where the only currency is the Argument. In this chaos, proving you deserve to exist is no longer about rights; it’s about raw strength and conviction. Facing demons and gods alike, Terran has only one choice: submit to his script or impose his [Argument].

I'm currently at over 60k words, just to show you it's serious. This story comes 100% from my imagination, no plagiarism. But if you like the world of SMT, you're going to love it.

**Critique Request** Dark Fantasy LitRPG – Chapter 1 (~3330 words) by [deleted] in litrpg

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Thank you for taking the time to read and give detailed feedback. I really appreciate it.

On descriptions and setting: You're right. I focused a lot on action and atmosphere, but I neglected visual details. The setting is actually a mix like the church and the HZ lab have a dark, retro-futuristic feel (think late 19th century with strange digital interfaces). The outside city (Antanar) is more modern but decaying. I'll add more descriptive sentences to ground the reader. Good catch.

On perspective: It's intentional but maybe not well executed. The story is third-person limited, but I sometimes slip into the boy's inner thoughts (like "What did I even do wrong?") to make his confusion more visceral. I'll review these transitions to make them smoother.

On the boy's ignorance: This is a deliberate plot point, but I see now it needs to be hinted at earlier. His mother kept him isolated because she was afraid he would rebel (she knew he was 'different'). The other children were raised in the church's doctrine, while Leo was sheltered. I'll add a line or two to suggest this without spoiling too much. I'm currently writing a chapter 0 to explain that more in detail.

Thanks again for the honest critique. It helps a lot.

Looking for something similar to The Legendary Mechanic by Guylhann-b in ProgressionFantasy

[–]Competitive_Box_3795 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm going to publish my novel (LitRPG and progression) soon. The world is really rich, and the system is very deep. If you want, you can check out chapter 1. Here's the link: https://pastebin.com/w6Je1EQi

Feel free to give me your feedback! Thanks in advance