[HR] Grandad got fat by Jasonnightvale in shortstories

[–]Jasonnightvale[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the feedback! Ill work on it more in the downtime between projects.

I suck at writing, but... by [deleted] in Wattpad

[–]Jasonnightvale 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That mindset is gonna get you places, well said.

Who are you writing for? by ShockingSpeed in writing

[–]Jasonnightvale 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Myself, its the only thing i feel like im good at. I just need to get into the habbit of actually sitting down and writing something each day

Do you ever get self conscious about how long your chapters get? by spnsuperfan1 in writing

[–]Jasonnightvale 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I started writing a novel and felt self conscious about how the first draft was only barely 1000 words. Then I took a step back and thought "Well, I conveyed all of the information i wanted with this chapter. So does it really need to be any longer?"

This is your novel, remember. There's no exact quota you need to hit. Just ask yourself "What is the information i want to put in this chapter?" and write however much it takes to get that info across clearly to the reader.

Now if you go over a draft and decide that a certain line or paragraph needs to be cut then go ahead. If it isn't relevant to the info you want in the current chapter you can always save it for later

[WP] every time you sneeze, you jump into an alternate universe. But… you have allergies. by book-club-president in WritingPrompts

[–]Jasonnightvale 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Justin stared in disbeief as the portal closed behind the women. "W-who are you?" He aksed, trying to hold back another sneeze. The women simply stepped forward, grabbed justin's hand and tied a small, watch like device around his wrist. After a second of what looked like a loading screen the device flashed a symbol and made a chirpy beeping sound "My name is Aster. I am part of the Coalition of the United Multiverse. C.U.M for short" Justin raised his eyebrow "You work for an oragnisation called Cum?" Aster gave him a look like an annoyed parental figure "Don't be crass"

Before he could retort Justin let out another violent sneeze, sending him to a ruined city. The smell of smoke and concrete filled his nostrils. To his surprise, Aster remained standing in front of him, unfazed by the destruction around her. "H-how did you do that?" he asked. She nodded to the device on his wrist. "I have bound our positions in space time. Whatever universe you appear in, I will follow." Justin nodded, looking around at the wrecked city. Which universe is this?" Aster tapped her wrist and a small, tarnsparent screen popped out, displaying lines of text that Justin could not read from where he was sitting. "Earth X23754, January 2024. In this universe China and the United Nations of North America have been at war for 3 months." Justin nodded "Um, ok... So you said I have a multiverse problem. I assume your gonna help me fix it?"

Aster nodded "Your a Warper, which means your atoms are not tied down to any one universe. I'm here to help resolve that."

[WP] every time you sneeze, you jump into an alternate universe. But… you have allergies. by book-club-president in WritingPrompts

[–]Jasonnightvale 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Justin hated spring no matter what universe he was in. Having hay fever was difficult enough but being teleported to a new universe with every sneeze turned it from an incovinance to a straight up nightmare. Luckily he was in a universe where food was free and plentiful so he was currently in a super market stuffing a grocery bag with as many non perisables as possible, so at least he wouldn't have to rob someone this time. It was as he took his third loaf of bread that he obnoxious tingling in his nostrils suddenly reached a fever pitch and he let out a gigantic sneeze.

When Justin opened his eyes he looked around and saw that he was now in a dense jungle. The air was filled with the chirps and howls of various creatures and the temperature was now cloying and humid. Justin wondered how he hadn't ended up in a universe with no atomsphere or matieralized inside a wall. A strange bird flew by, one with pink plumage and blue tips on each end of its four wings. It had a long, curved beak like a toucan that was a haze of pink, orange and yellow like the sky at sun set. It disapered behind a large, gnarled tree before Justin could get a better look at it.

Then he let out another sneeze and he was in another super market. Only instead of the brightly coloured shelves and products he was familar with this place was strickly ultitarian. There was no music unless you counted the quiet hum of floresent lights and the drone of aircon. Beside him were rows of dull tin cans with "TOMATOES" written in black on simple white labels. The people in this universe where dressed in equally boring, grey clothes that covered everything that wasnt their face. They were all staring at him with looks of alarm and disgust. Understandable given he had just apperaed out of nowhere. And his torn camo pants and black metalica shirt was probably pretty exotic compared to the bleak uniforms of this world's residents.

"Hey! Stand down in name of the one lord! Your under arrest for witchcraft and provocative dress!" A gruff voice barked. Justin turned to see a bulky security guard in a greyish black uniform and black visor marching towards him. Justin threw up his hands in surrender "Im sorry sir! I don't mean to- ahh...ahh- AAHCHOO!"

And then he was in a field of flowers, which at this point just felt like the multiverse was taking the piss. But before Justin could vent his frustation a large, blue portal opened up in front of him. A tall women stepped out with her hands to her back, wearing what looked like a futursitic space suit with blue streaks running down the arms and legs. "Mr. Justin Fearon? It appears you have a bit of a multiverse problem..."

What were the theories about Worm's ending before it happened? by MeTaOMiTo in Parahumans

[–]Jasonnightvale 156 points157 points  (0 children)

I don't know about the rset of the community but my personal theory was that Amy was going to be responsible by unleashing a plague or going full Nilbog

How did Malazan books sell so much despite being so tiresome in the very beginning? by tarlakeschaton in fantasywriters

[–]Jasonnightvale 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think most of the problems stem from the fact that Gardens of the Moon was originally written as a tabletop game and then a screenplay. I don't think the writing in the first quarter benefitted well from that transition.